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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 I don’t want to heal and move past who we were I don’t want to forget and have it become a blur I want to relive it all over again I want to re-visit all the places we’ve been I don’t want to move on, I want to go back I want a heart that’s whole, not one with a crack Don’t rescue me from this darkened pit Don’t try to move me from where I sit I hoped once and gave it my heart Left here to crumble as I watched it depart Now you want me to hope once more To pick my broken soul up off the floor Perhaps I will give love one last try For when my heart breaks again it will surly die Then the coldness of Alone will sheild my pain And I will never feel broken like this again |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Such pain can only come from true love. I am sorry that your partner was not able to accept the wonderful gift you offered him, it is truely his loss. Now you want me to hope once more To pick my broken soul up off the floor Perhaps I will give love one last try For when my heart breaks again it will surly die Then the coldness of Alone will sheild my pain And I will never feel broken like this again You must not give into the pain, you will miss so much if you simply seal yourself off. I know it hurts but care for that pain and allow it to soothe and find the one who is right for you. well written excellent read. Here is a smile, not sure if it will help  ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. Faster- manic street preachers I am an architect, they call me a butcher I am a pioneer, they call me primitive I am purity, they call me perverted Holding you but I only miss these things when they leave I am idiot drug hive, the virgin, the tattered and the torn Life is for the cold made warm and they are just lizards Self-disgust is self-obsession honey and I do as I please A morality obedient, only to the cleansed repented *I am stronger than Mensa, Miller and Mailer I spat out Plath and Pinter I am all the things that you regret A truth that washes that learnt how to spell The first time you see yourself naked you cry Soft skin now acne, foul breath, so broken He loves me truly this mute solitude I'm draining I know I believe in othing but it is my nothing Sleep can't hide the thoughts splitting through my mind Shadows aren't clean, false mirrors too many people awake If you stand up like a nail then you will be knocked down I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else * chorus So damn easy to cave in, man kills everything (x4) ----- |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Butterflies ... my heart is breaking just reading your words! This is soulfully expressed with such incredible sentiments. I can feel it Butterflies ... beautifully written. Best wishes for future love and happiness, /Kit |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh dear, this poem is so heartwrenching .. then the coldness of alone will shield my pain .. This verse is so powerful! Coco |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Oh(wipes tears from her eyes) this really made me cry. Such emotion,such pain.{{hugs}} |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh, this was so sad, Butterflies! Love is a risky thing. You throw your heart in the air, stand back, and hope someone catches it before it hits the ground and shatters. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Sometimes, when the battle is over and the dust settles, we find that the sorrow is the only thing we have left. As such, we dare not remove the knife that seals the wound ... This was full of raw emotions -- I hope they were softened in the sharing ... --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
*~Butterflies DC this was so heartwrenching. i am crying as i am responding to this piece. that doesn't happen often. you write your pain exceptionally well. each verse i felt completely. this shattered my heart to read. however, i know in time you will love again...and you will perservere. i just got that feeling. here is a smile for you. hope that helps somehow my friend. please take care. ~amy~ "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh* so many times now... you know...I know...oh no ... seems your muse is dragging you thru the same fire mine was the other day... (you would think we would be use to it by now) we've had enough practice...*wink* breaking me heart girl... beautiful poem all dressed up in pain-- quiet comfort is sometimes enough... if not..then we purge thru our poetry you know..I know ... me loves ya SS jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
B.D.C., Ouch....I feel all of your pain my friend. This was really great work. I know exactly how you feel....it is scary. Hang in there and do not be afraid to risk....you must to gain the love you deserve. Take Care, LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Butterflies, this was a wonderfull poem. I am one that believe you need to pick your soul up off the floor, and take it one step until your running full speed ahead. The light is always up ahead. Great job. Parker |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
It made me cry and gave me chills..I know the feeling all to well.. I am lining this poem right now....it is so painful to fall over and over again with the same person....thank you for the great writing I enjoyed it wholeheartedly... |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
That was suppossed to be living not lining "oops" sorry for the typo..  |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Moments of loss and heartache are the few times we remember we are human, we are alive. The pain comes out in the poem. It is a beautiful, heartwrenching piece. If not for the rain, would the sun seem as bright? Trew. I have been to see the world. Tasted life at every turn. And all the time your face came back to haunt me. -Chris DeBurgh |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
Butterflies, Ohh my....this is such a sad one, I feel your pain all along the poem.....I loved it !! Pls, don't be afraid to love again....you deserve the best. regards, shilpi |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think you write such longing into your words. Perhaps you should give love one more try. Nicely done! |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Butterflies~ I felt this one! Great emotional piece!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My thanks to each and every one of you for the ((hugs)) the concern and the praise. Replies like this remind me once again of why I post my feelings here within the safety of this place. Thank you All!! |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
Bdc, When I read this poem, it helped me to remember that other people experience this same thing. I'm going through the pain right now, and it's really hard. Sometimes all you can do is get up each day, and hope the sun will shine so you can remember the beauty each day, not the sorrows. I'm sorry you're going through it! I'm right there with you! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Soo sad sweet butterflies, very emotional and heart breaking. HUGS Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Out of all your works this is my favorite and I tear up thinking of someone as sweet as you having to know this pain. This is beautiful in many many levels. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This poem may be heartwrenching, but your thoughts and expression are amazing. Wanting to remain in the pits of sorrow so as not to loose that strong feeling of love. Beautiful poem. much admired by me Liz |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Looks like I missed a few thank-you's on this, so sorry for that~ Tulip* There is often comfort in knowing that you are not alone...I've found it gets me through the darkest nights, thank you for your kind reply~ Sweet Tracie* ((Hugs)) to you too for your kindness~ Mark* You went digging...lol Thank you so much for the compliment, I haven't written many poems that aren't sad...but it has helped to heal so many of the old hurts that I couldn't let go of. Thank you again from the bottom of my heart~ Liz* Thank you I'm touched that you feel that way, in alot of ways letting go of the pain also lets go of the love~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Butterflies_dont_cry, I believe that this is the first writing by you that I have read. I know, from reading this one, that there will be many more. This is so vivid and meaningful to me. Thank you for sharing it with me. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Bill* There are many out there...I've been around a while and yes there will be manymore to come. You are very welcome and thank you for sharing your comments with me~ |
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