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For Now |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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For Now Speak in your hushed tones, Remind me of all you are, Erase flashing future thoughts, And fully occupy my present. Don’t warn me of leaving, Let us lose ourselves for now, Abandoning with restraint, Collecting a savings account. With you, windows open wide, Airy breezes do quicken, Rest comes with simple ease, Upon a pillow of shoulder. Don’t ask what you already know, Those fears are too crushing, As dreams turn monochrome, I’ll sense you have gone. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
The pain of break up...of a loved one leaving, you captured this perfectly. That is if I am reading the poem right. Erase flashing future thoughts, And fully occupy my present. Rest comes with simple ease, Upon a pillow of shoulder. Don’t ask what you already know, Those fears are too crushing, As dreams turn monochrome, I’ll sense you have gone. Some beautiful images mixed with sadness. There is a great sense of loss in your words. excellent poem. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Outside open mouthed crowds Pass each other as if they're drugged Down pale corridors of routine Where life falls unatoned " "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Lovely...but so sad. Good writing.  MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, I love you! Your Lady June*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
As dreams turn monochrome, I’ll sense you have gone. ......... Parting is such a difficult thing to do...very well written Corinne Regards and take care, Sudhir My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully expressed Corinne ... I can almost feel the ache myself. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Much too sad for such a lovely heart. Hope the rainbow breaks in with vivid color with the pot of gold easily within your reach. Love ya', gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How very sad, Corinne. Well done. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I thought this poem was about living the moment, without worrying about the moment of departure, but your last two lines had me confused. Nevertheless a wonderful poem. Enjoyed it a lot. |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
So very sad... It gave me the feeling of still holding something you know you're going to lose. Beautifully written, Corinne. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you for your kind words, Brian, Magnolia Blue, Sudhir, Kit, Marge, Liz,Munda and Trew. Trying to capture the feelings of being with someone you love knowing they have to leave. Corinne |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The writing comes from the heart...and the feeling from the soul. If you don't hear the words you can almost forget for a moment. Thank you for sharing this! |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Corinne~ Sad ... and so beautifully written. ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Corinne, you captured those feelings very well....*sigh* Unfortunately, I can relate to your every word. "Mine" left yesterday. I am only thankful he crossed my path, even if just briefly, and too, am thankful I got to share my heart with him before he left. A remarkable experience this is. Loving someone you know will go. Makes those few tender moments seem priceless....Thank you so much for this. It has touched me deeply. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
C, this is such a cool poem so much class and grace... wisdom and heart laced in your words. I do so enjoy the way you write jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you so, Butterflies and Lorraine. PoetFemmeFatale, ah, then you know exactly, wanting him to stay knowing planes don't wait. Hope for a brighter future, yes? Thank you also, janet Marie, for always being so supportive. Corinne |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Corrine~ Soo sad yet soo beautiful, I could feel the intensity in this and the struggle to keep hold but knowing you have to let go. HUGS Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
I loved the words you chose for this poem...it really hit me deep....it speaks of things I am going through right now...I enjoyed to the point of tears...Thank you... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
This was so heartwrenching and sad. Heartfelt emotions captured perfectly by your poetic pen. There were so many stanzas in this that were just plain awesome! I enjoying your style of writing immensly! take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Tracie, Sarah and Aimster. Corinne |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
That's so beautiful but yet so sad. I feel like I'm in a situation like that myself right now. "sigh" Kat |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Corinne... So sad, but well written. Parting ways is never easy to do. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I never know what I'll find when I open one of your poems - I only know that I'll enjoy it.. Nice work here, Corinne..  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Nan, Lone Wolf and Kat! This was a tough one to post, very personal and close to home. Corinne |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
So beautiful, so right on the mark, sweet poet Core. Extended Breaths You bring me to a hush with your eyes, as banished thoughts come stealing back and are awash in mine. Squeezing drops of future from my mind, I see them fall upon your cheek; they blend there with my sighs. You bear me beyond peace with your touch, as treasured beats of present fill with colors from your brush. Come hold me to this side of our day; the other side will claim its time - too soon will have its way. © RAM 6/12/00 |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow....as dreams turn monochrome....wow...this is incredible....love it! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, RAM, a beautful response poem, and thank you also, Corazon! Corinne [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
thank you, Core; the beauty dwells with my muse. Rick [This message has been edited by RAM (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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