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Step Inside My Eyes
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Step Inside My Eyes |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
Step inside and you'll realize, My life is filled with lies. Tragic bags and 30 shot mags, Wipe your face with bloody rags. Send a bloody kiss from me to you, What'd you think I would do? Witnessed a killer kill, Did it for a thrill. When only time will tell who dies, Come look deeply in my eyes. Because these our the days of all our lives, Bloody bloody mess makes you break out in hives. See the vengance that lies, When somone reaches Heaven's skies. Look into my eyes tell me what you see, You won't find a trace left of me. Soul raped and taken from me, Nothing more I can be. Grasp my life with all your might, Hurry up soon I'll be gone out of sight. Saw a helpless lady die, Everyday I sit and can't forget though I try. Step inside and you will see, That there is nothing left of what once was me... *dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001 |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I liked this poem. it captured the emotion well… at least I think so, I've never killed any body. |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
i havent either man, that isnt what i said i said ive seen 2 ppl killed |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one. I liked the style and ryhme in this one. Great job.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Author Unknown: This is a fantastic poem. The words used to describe what you have seen sends off such vivid images in my mind. To experience what you have seen would be unimaginable. Thankyou for sharing such a great piece on such an event. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great job, I think this one was written very well! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You've seen enough to give you a glimpse into the psyche of a killer, and have an understanding of the events. This is why war veterans have so many problems. This situation that you have witnessed twice has obviously been good for your writing skill. Keep it up, I enjoyed this poem a great deal. |
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