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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-01-09 01:20 PM



"Reaper"

Why must mortality
Have such finality
Why must this place
Be inhabited by such a race
Why do we save and save
Simply to be lowered into a grave
Money does not save our lives
The rich can still die by the simplest of knives
Why do we cry such a terrible sound
For soon enough we will be lowered to the ground
When you breathe your last breath
Will surely meet your life's death
Emotions run wild
Like the heart of a child
Death brings overwhelming fears
And when it comes for others it brings tears
She was someone's mother
He was someone's brother
Aunts uncles nieces and nephews
All brake down at the sad, sad news
A father a daughter someone has died
As if their eyes know the tears must be cried
Eternal life no one finds
It remains to be seen just in our minds
And still the same news every year
Death was and always will be here


© Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-01-09 01:30 PM


wow...... i liked this one a lot. It's true that death will always be here. Chaucer's Cantebury tales talks about this. I once wrote in a essay that TIME is DEATH's accomplice. I like the whole idea of that.
anyway yea...nice one pal. Great read.



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keoni
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2 posted 2001-01-09 02:16 PM


"Money does not save our lives
The rich can still die by the simplest of knives"
I love that line! Death is something people brush off all the time. I think it's alot more important than that. Great poem.
Jon

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Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-01-09 02:57 PM


A poem capturing the essence of death... i love it.  It has been done before, but perhaps not so eloquently.
I truly enjoyed this piece, although I disagree with your distaste for our "race."  I think that nothing is more beautiful than the human race, and we deserve to consume all resources necessary in our quest for Utopia.
Of course, just my opinion.  ^_^  Great poem.

jeremydraul
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4 posted 2001-01-09 03:14 PM


sorry for the 2ble post

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jeremydraul
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5 posted 2001-01-09 03:15 PM


i always find myself agreeing with allan...
this poem really portrayed very good details about death
im glad I read it
~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-01-09 08:02 PM


This is written so well, I like how it's done.  Death can be hard to deal with, but it will always come.  Great writing.

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Poet on Acid
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7 posted 2001-01-09 09:35 PM


Thanx for the always honest opinions, and as for my 'distaste' for the human race that statement is slightly a skew, I cannot dettach myself from being human, I simply dispise certain aspects of the human mind, such as hate and envy...anyways thanx again for the replies.
orange()alligator
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8 posted 2001-02-06 11:42 PM


poet,
wow this one was great! longer then ur usual ones too...i like how you make the words flow together, it's like the reader doesn't have to pause.  great writin! keep it up!!
-orange()alligator

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