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lilpoet
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0 posted 2001-01-08 10:02 PM



Our love isn't what it used to be
It's now a branch instead of a tree
And everytime I wish you were here
You arn't even close to being near
Although I grow to love you more each day
I fear your love for me slowly goes away
Last night I took a walk
And instead of breaking up we need to talk
I don't want to be just your friend
And with all my heart I don't want this love to end
I can't do this on my own
And I dread being alone
All without you
I don't know what I would do
I would rather die
Then to see you say goodbye
And this may sound stupid
But I think I got hit by cupid
I want to be with you forever
Grow up and live our life together



~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-09 12:52 PM


A very nicely communicated piece.
"And this may sound stupid
But I think I got hit by cupid"
This rhyme is clever, it made me chuckle.  Well done.

Stephanya
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2 posted 2001-01-09 02:10 AM


Very nice, hon. I've been there and done that a few times. Most times everything fell apart for me, but this time it worked out. Either way, I survived...My gram always said, "He might seem like the right one, but there's always going to be a better one waiting out there for you. You just have to search for him."
And she's right. I found 4 of them...3 did nothing but cause me pain, and now I am really in love, yes for the 2nd time, but this time the Love is pure. Good Luck!

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"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

..

Poet on Acid
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3 posted 2001-01-09 09:24 AM


thats a rather sadening poem, good though, I like your poems, so keep writing.
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4 posted 2001-01-09 01:05 PM


This was great but so sad. I know how you're feeling right now. I feel the same. Let's just hope we both pull through.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-01-09 07:41 PM


I hope you can work this out.  You did a really good job on the poem

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6 posted 2001-01-14 12:05 PM


I really hope that you can work this out. Maybe it will help a little if you tell him exactly how you feel, you never know, he might feel that you dont like him the same way anymore?? I'd hate to see your relationship end...i really hope things work out between you two.
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