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Angel in Flight
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0 posted 2001-01-08 09:10 PM


Upon the light of the midnight snow
a body lies omitted a glow
and through this visionary speak
it is own destiny that we seek.

And through the weaves that we sow
reminisce always obtain another blow
for the man that lies amongst us still
wouldnt have died if only the Will.

And in equidistance I do comprehend  
this is not a domicile suited for man.
And so i promulgate this with heart held high
at least I know my Will can not die.


© Copyright 2001 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
Poet on Acid
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1 posted 2001-01-08 09:18 PM


there you people go agai with big words, I'm only in highschool how do you expect me to comprehend words such as 'heart' and 'will' some people just don't know when to stop showing off...ok enough with the stupidity. Great poem, not sure what you mean to convey but to me it sounded like you were basically saying 'you can kill the body but my soul is my own' or something to that affect. anyways thank you for sharing this and keep writing
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2 posted 2001-01-08 09:29 PM


   This was extrordinary... (spelling??) I loved every single line........
   ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Angel in Flight
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3 posted 2001-01-08 11:56 PM


Poet on acid, sorry for the big words there and i did not mean to show off what so ever its just my style of writting. I love to  make a poem with words so enormous in size that it catches the readers eye, and when they do know the meaning of the words and put it together.... They then see how beautiful it has become. Thank you for your deep thought while reading my poem. I love how you anlyzed my poem also.

Carly~ thank you that means alot to me.

[This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-09-2001).]

Angel in Flight
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4 posted 2001-01-08 11:58 PM


WOW, typos typos i am soooo sorry about that everyone
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5 posted 2001-01-09 12:52 PM


This was a nice poem. I liked it a lot. A LOT! Keep posting pal.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-01-09 02:22 PM


This poem is done very well!  And about the typos, you can go back and edit your posts, it's the third little picture thing past the date and time.  Great job on the poem.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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