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IsGona
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0 posted 2001-01-07 10:04 PM


Well, people have been saying to post more.  I don't see why, but you asked for it.  Here is another attempt at poetry.

Michelle...

M emories of those times
I  thought you'd be my wife
C all me back to my past
H indering the progress of my life
E ngrossing my every thought
L onging for nothing new
L ooking over my shoulder.... I'm
E ndlessly haunted. Missing you


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"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~


[This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-07-2001).]

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-07 10:26 PM


Well done, Jason.  I absolutely love acronyms-- they take such patience and ability to write.  Reminds me of the old days, in elementary school, when we had to write an acronym of our name with self-descriptive words (and poor alex had the toughest time of all)
I remember making a phrase rather than just a few adjectives, and getting yelled at for it!
Ah, memories!  Maybe I'll go write a nice little acronym.  Thanks for reminding me of the format.
You probably had loads of fun writing it!  I enjoyed reading it!

jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-07 10:49 PM


allan brings up the best memories..
i remember all those too!
thanks for the reminder IsGona
Beaitiful peice
best wishes

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2001-01-08 06:00 AM


Wonderful acrostic IsGona! Beautiful flow, very nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-01-08 12:03 PM


This was a good one Jason. I liked it a lot. Very well written and thought out. I couldn't have done this. Nice one!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Author Unknown
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5 posted 2001-01-08 12:09 PM


pretty good man, especially when a moderator leaves a reply to ya work


*dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001

Jenn Cirrincione
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6 posted 2001-01-08 02:32 PM


Good job Jason. This girl must have been really special.... wife, eh? I can't even fathom marriage yet... I couldn't imagine any of the guys  I've dated being with me for a lifetime! Well, nice work!
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


IsGona
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7 posted 2001-01-09 12:24 PM


Allen ~ thanks.. I lok forward to hearing an acrostic form you.

Jeremy ~ The good ol' days huh?  hehe thanks man.  

Kit ~ you are very kind.  Much thanks

Dopey Dope ~ Wow look I actually had the energy to right your whole name.. lol Thanks alot.  Much apreciated.

Unknown ~ thank you.  Glad you liked it.

Jenn ~ Thanks alot.  This girl was and IS very special to me.  Life Just took us in seperate directions.  But yeah... I thought she was going to be my wife.  She is still a great friend just long distance at the time... who knows what the future holds but I just miss her and the times we spent together... hence the poem.  Thanks again.  sorry for babling...

~Jason


"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-01-09 12:52 PM


You did an excellent job with this style of writing, the poem is done very well.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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