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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2001-01-07 09:20 PM


This poem has been deleted due to refrence to suicide. Although we appreciate the disclaimer, it does not change the content of the piece. If you have any questions, feel free to e-mail myself or any of the moderators.

[This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 01-08-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
IsGona
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1 posted 2001-01-07 09:27 PM


I better reply quick... They might boot this one.... I hope not, because it is a good piece.  I think it descibes the pits of depression nicely.  

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-07 09:30 PM


a tad risky, but very descriptive
im sure we all feel this way sooner or later
awesome work my friend

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2001-01-07 09:50 PM



   Hey man. Again, you prove talent and an understanding of things that I try not to see....
   ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-01-07 10:35 PM


I enjoyed this poem, but it makes me uneasy.

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-07-2001).]

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2001-01-07 10:43 PM


"Ain't that sweet?
A death transaction."

Well worded as usual man, good job on this one!

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6 posted 2001-01-08 01:46 PM


That was great man. even though it does seem a bit morbid. Sometimes the only way to avoid suicide is to write about it. Confusing yes but then again the human mind is an enigma in itself.
GirlsBestFriend
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7 posted 2001-01-08 03:29 PM


I agree with Poet on Acid. I'm sure some ppl will learn from ur poems Dopey! good luck!!

~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

keoni
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8 posted 2001-01-08 03:47 PM


I used to write poem with this same depressing tone so I can relate. Depression gets a hold of all of us sometimes, but you just got to remember that there is always something to look forward to. I know you know this already so I guess I'm just reminding myself. Nice job.
                                          Jon

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sweetstuff101
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9 posted 2001-01-08 04:26 PM


that is really really sad! Suicide is...just really depressing!!! Ok I am going to shut up now...before I start confusing myself again...been doing that a lot today!! Well great poem, keep it up!!

Luv Always,  
  Priscilla


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you" and mean it, but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????

Tamma
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10 posted 2001-01-08 05:49 PM


Hmmm...I had this thought earlier today...with me losing alot of ppl in my life...not nessicerily by death...but well, I kinda get the feeling Justin's slipping away   oh, by the way, Dopey...Nice Pic  


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Ina
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11 posted 2001-01-08 08:51 PM


lol!hey there mr. Nike commercial, "just do it". lol. you put your pic up before me.grr
amazing poem thats why im replying. I think thats a description that fits depression..but i wouldnt know anything about that... it was really well expressed
Regina

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