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Found an Angel, burned it's wings
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Found an Angel, burned it's wings |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Found an angel Burned its wings, I strangled their throat So they cannot sing. Damn angels They are always around Can't they go away? Or let me have them drown? Flying about Like they're a friggin airplane, How come I never see them walking about With a bum leg and a cane? Found an angel Burned its wings, How come you never find one Where both ways the door swings? Found an angel Burned its wings, Now where did all that hope go That it always seems to bring? Found an angel Burned its wings, I strangled their throat So they could not sing. *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good poem here! I liked it a lot! Very original. I like the title and those lines in the poem. Very nicely composed.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I know how ya feel...But don't burn my angels...please try to fly with them, not end their flight.... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Yes Yes Yes... Very original. I must agree with every thing dopey said. Great work Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Yes, very orginal... But I like it  |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
good interpretation of burning this religious figure.. dont know if thats how to word it but I liked the idea.. keep being yourself in your writing best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem. I can understand where you're coming from but I have to agree with Child of the Stars. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Wow, so many great poets in one place...nice work. But I must agree with 'Carly' as well, though it is YOUR form of expression and as long as it comes from the heart it will always be right. "Happiness is nothing without the contrast of sadness" -ME! |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
this is deep, creative and very awesome *dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001 |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
LOL not deep as some other might liek to think.. cause i knwo the origin of this *muahahaha* i need to stop giving you ideas... i just wish my poem that i wrote last nite was appropriate for post!!!! -=Justine=- |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem is interesting, and that last reply has me thinking this isn't so deep after all??? Well, anyway, I think it's well expressed. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hmmmm......very interesting thing to do I just don't understand why you'd wanna do such a thing I love the poems as a whole, but it does bother me to know you feel this way i'll have to talk to you bout this one  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
JUSTINE!! shhhh... how dare you reveal my inspirations like that. you ought to be ashamed!! Thanks for the replies, i kind of wrote this in part because my aunt died and she loved angels and she's suppose to be my angel but it doesn't look like she's helping me any right now. but thanks for everyone's concern your generosity is appreciated. lol~~*Valerie*~~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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