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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-01-07 08:32 AM



"Five"

Fear
Devouring my soul
Pain
Taking its toll
Time
Used up in vain
Power
Pointless to gain
Blood
Dripping today
Life
Slipping away
Innocence
Just a delusion
Purity
Merely illusion


  About the title, it has no significance. whenever I write poems and can't think of a title I just give it a number. A little dettached I know but oh well.

© Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-01-07 10:32 AM



   Welcome to Passions...this was a very heart-numbing poem, I think. It was amazing, and I could feel everything...please keep posting....

    ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Bright_Eyes
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2 posted 2001-01-07 11:01 AM


I really liked this poem because the rhyme didn't take away from what you were trying to say, it enhanced the meaning of it!  GREAT FIRST POST!  I think you'll like it here!  
IsGona
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3 posted 2001-01-07 11:09 AM


Great poem poet.  I think you said exactly what you wanted to say here.  I hope you are haveing a better day today.  Keep posting, and Welcome.
Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Suga_Baby
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4 posted 2001-01-07 01:08 PM


Wow great post! This was really good! Welcome to Passions  
Allan Riverwood
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5 posted 2001-01-07 01:12 PM


Very simple and powerful.  You write well, keep it up.
Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-01-07 02:18 PM


Welcome to Passions
Great job on your first post here, I like the form you used.  I hope you like it here and keep posting more poems for us to read!


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Melster
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7 posted 2001-01-07 04:43 PM


Welcome...  Great post...  look forward to reading more!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Pixie-Babe03
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8 posted 2001-01-07 08:18 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! i hope you liek it here as much as everyone!
wow... this is a great poem i look forward to seeing more soon!!
~*Pixie*~

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9 posted 2001-01-07 09:03 PM


This was amazing. I loved this poem. Wonderful style and format.....good scheme....just wow. nice one pal!

Welcome to Passions!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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10 posted 2001-01-07 09:19 PM


Welcome to Passions!

We all have times that we feel this way about life, and you do a wonderful job of putting it into verse. Thanks for sharing

PS-check your e-mail

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



jeremydraul
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11 posted 2001-01-07 09:35 PM


I agree with everyone and also offer my welcome! great post.

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Poet on Acid
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12 posted 2001-01-08 01:42 PM


Thank you everyone. I'm glad you took the time to read my poem. I don't concern myself to much with the form or style I'm usually more focused on the emotions I try to impart with the words. But I'm happy to see it's not that bad. Thanx again.
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13 posted 2001-01-09 10:27 PM


Welcome To Passions!! This was a really good first post to enter into passions with. I hope that you like it here just as much as the rest of us do. You seem to be very talented and i look forward to reading more of your work!
anonymousfemale
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14 posted 2001-01-10 04:02 AM


Poet on Acid: Before I say anything, I love your name! Welcome too. Although I am sure that you have already had enough of these more cannot hurt.  

This is a really quite a great poem. If you aim to impact with your words, you have done a good job here. Great style. I liked
"Power
Pointless to gain."

It couldn't be more true.

Keep it up.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


Poet on Acid
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15 posted 2001-01-10 05:22 PM


hmmm....it's not letting me post a new topic....

>¶Øʆ<

Jenn Cirrincione
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16 posted 2001-01-10 07:42 PM


Nice work. Isn't life just a crock sometimes? hehehe well.... keep posting!
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


Jose Marti
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17 posted 2001-01-11 12:28 PM


that wasI like ed this poem a lot. I feel like taht sometimes, especially when I'm idle.
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