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Suga_Baby
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0 posted 2001-01-07 01:17 AM


The Flame that Unites

I’m so glad I met you…
I couldn’t ask for more.
You make me laugh and smile.
My happiness seems to soar.

I love to be held by you…
Forever and forever…
Hold me in your embrace
And protect me from whatever.

I could kiss you for hours…
Filled with butterflies inside…
So sweet is the taste,
And the chills run down my spine.

I never want to leave you…
A good-bye kiss and then,
You’re gone, I’m alone
And I long to see you again.

And we are so good together…
This everyone can see.
But that is purely the flame
That unites you and me.



[This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (edited 01-07-2001).]

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IsGona
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1 posted 2001-01-07 01:30 AM


This is a very sweet poem.  sounds like a great relationship.  Sorry that you ever had to say goodbye.  I hope it's just a temporary good bye.
Jason

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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2 posted 2001-01-07 02:08 AM


I envy your ability to name your poems... this title caught my eye.  I typically give my poems a single word for a name.
The poem itself is well done, not disappointing.  "Flames," if I am not incorrect, symbolize the consumptive nature of love, that it burns things quickly?  Just a thought.  ^_^
Great poem.

Suga_Baby
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3 posted 2001-01-07 01:05 PM


Just so that everyone understands:
"I never want to leave you…
A good-bye kiss and then,
You’re gone, I’m alone
And I long to see you again."
This stanza is not about a permanent separation... it's about how my BF and I only see each other on weekends and when the night comes to an end, and we've had our goodbye kiss, I have to wait another week to see him again, unless I get lucky *LOL* Hopefully now that I have my license and a car, I can see him during the week sometimes, too   But I just wanted to clear that up.

-=Suga=-


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4 posted 2001-01-07 01:55 PM


Oh so he's your BF now? OOooooooooo!!!!
Oh and hey.......are you sure those are "chills" running down your spine? Oooooooooooooo!!!!!!
Ok sorry, I get immature here and there. MOstly there, but hey.
Nice love poem as always. You're glowing.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Suga_Baby
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5 posted 2001-01-07 02:11 PM


*LOL* He's been my BF for almost a month now, Dopey  
Melster
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6 posted 2001-01-07 04:41 PM


THat is soo beautiful, the flame that unites us!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

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7 posted 2001-01-08 04:54 PM


lol at Dopey   This poem was good, I like how it's done

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8 posted 2001-01-09 06:08 PM


he's a very lucky guy, he has someone who cares as much as you do  
Just don't mid Dopey's naughty thoughts  
very romantic poem
thanks for sharing it

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9 posted 2001-01-13 11:52 PM


There really is nothing that can replace the feelings you have when your in love huh? It definately sounds like your head over heals hun...its such a wonderful feeling and i hope things forever stay this way for u  
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