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The Will to fight |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
I know this poem is not as great as others in my past or on the boards here, but I wrote this at a time in my life when I was very much afraid. And to tell you the truth I still am afraid. Though things are bad and you want to run away. Though you fight for strength when all your strength does is decay. When you look for a hiding place when there is none to be found. When you want it all to stop but cant turn yourself around. When you feel this little emptiness that pokes at you inside. And all you want to do is smile but the smile seems to hide. When fear builds up inside of you until there’s no relief and after all this happens hope and strength you seek. You scream for help but no one seems to hear. Its almost like no one knows your there. You stare into blank space and shake with lasting fright. You no longer have the will....You don’t have the will to fight. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Fear can be a source of strength-- if you learn how to conduct it properly. Fight to end the fear. Easier said than done, i know. I enjoyed this poem. Well done. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful expression Mandi! Welcome to Passions!  This was a very descriptive first post, very nicely done ... I hope to read more! (ps, check your e-mail) Best wishes, /Kit |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Great first poem Mandi... Welcome to passions. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
************** Allan, Thank you for your post it gave me some hope for the future. As you said fight to end the fear, but you see its so much more just just fear. *************** Kit, Thank you so much for the card it is truly beautiful. *************** Isgona, thank you for the welcome. |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
Sorry about that typo back there allan I ment to say it is more *then* just fear |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
ooooh I like it I like it I LIKE IT! Great job, and welcome to Passions! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'll save you another apology... more "than" just fear. ^_^ |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
hehe Thank You Allan |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
wow, that was good. Sometimes when people read poems like that and know that they aren't the only ones feeling those things it helps. Sometimes. Keep writing. |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions Mandi. A wonderful first post, I must say! I liked this one very much. I'm going to just say that Allan is right......fight to end the fear and whatever is accompanying it. Ever heard of New Hamshire's motto that they have on their liscence plates? "Live free or die" Now that's true......whether is be from the british, or fear.......free yourself.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Yeah, I agree with the others, and great job on your first post here I hope to see more soon."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
Poet on Acid, Thank you for what you wrote it ment a very lot to me. |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
dopey, I am happy you enjoyed my poem and thank you for the welcome as well as the motto. I'll try to "free" myself. If that's possible. Lakewater, thank you for the welcome you have given me. Very much appreciated |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work, hope all turns out ok eventually, keep your head up and look towards the future, never look back!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
I didn't enjoy reading a poem (like now) for a while! I'll be watching for u and welcome here ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
welcome to passions!! i love this poem it is very well written hope to see more soon!~*Pixie*~ |
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Mandi Junior Member
since 2001-01-06
Posts 19Chicago |
Girlsbestfriend, Thank you for the welcome |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome to Passions!! This was a great first post. Im sorry to hear that you still feel this way though. Your poem had a lot of emotion in it and it was very well written. I liked it a lot, i cant wait to read more from you! Keep em comin |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
Welcome to Passions. Great first post. Just gotta remember you arent the only one who feels that way. Keep your head up. Steff |
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