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0 posted 2001-01-06 09:03 PM


Walking down the road,
Switching my mind back into freak mode.
Voices telling me I'm wrong,
Been waiting for so long.
For this day to come,
Chanting a deathly hum.
Your day is finally here,
For you to live in fear.
Because now I'm the one raging,
In battle we are engaging.
It's my life or your life,
The difference is I had to strife.
To carry on with everything goin on around me,
Made my brain kinda cloudy.
Hit me in my eye,
Tell me one more lie.
Deck you in your jaw,
Is that what she saw?
Kick you in your ribcage,
All this anger turned to rage.
Remember my words as you lay there and cry,
You took her life she didn't have to die.
And this is why I do the things I do,
Sending Bloody Kisses From Me To You...



*dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001

© Copyright 2001 Kyle Finn - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-06 09:28 PM


This was great. Question: Did somebody die? This is the second poem in which SOMEBODY died......explain



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Author Unknown
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2 posted 2001-01-06 09:36 PM


yes dopey when i was 13 my gf was killed by her ex, he ddint like me so he shot her


*dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001

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3 posted 2001-01-06 11:06 PM


I was about to ask the same question Dopey asked?  And I'm so sorry to hear thiat it actually is true.  I though when I read the first poem that it was fictional.  This is a tragedy...I am so sorry.  And this guy still walks the streets?  Thanks for the read.  I'm sorry  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Suga_Baby
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4 posted 2001-01-06 11:22 PM


oooh such anger, sorrow, and vengence... and where is justice?! Nice work...
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5 posted 2001-01-07 12:36 PM


Vengeance is a shallow concept-- all that it causes is more pain.  
All the bloody kisses in the world won't revive your lost friend.  It is cruel to say, I know, but it is true.
I truly am sorry for what you went through, but don't unleash your rage with your fists.  Do it with your pen.

Melster
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6 posted 2001-01-07 12:48 PM


this is such a sad story i see here unfolding...  you must have felt like you died right along with her...  I am soo sorry about what has happened and I wish there was something I could say to make you fell better, but chances are whatever I say won't help...  So I will wish you luck and hope that everything improves for you and that you can be happy someday...

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-01-07 02:09 PM


Your first two lines start this poem out very well and the ending of it finishes the feeling of it well.  So I guess what I'm trying to say is that this is well written   I have to agree with what Allan said though.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Author Unknown
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8 posted 2001-01-07 02:18 PM


man yall just dont know how bd somthin like that makes ya wanna get even and take the life that destroyed yours, it makes you do things youve never done and go crazy but in the end he got put on DR so its all good now, justice is a sweet thing

Author Unknown
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9 posted 2001-01-07 02:18 PM


man yall just dont know how bd somthin like that makes ya wanna get even and take the life that destroyed yours, it makes you do things youve never done and go crazy but in the end he got put on DR so its all good now, justice is a sweet thing


*dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001

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10 posted 2001-01-08 04:47 PM


You're right, I don't know how I would react to this in my own life, maybe I would share your feelings.    

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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