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mikeykrazy
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0 posted 2001-01-06 07:12 PM


this is how i feel about my newest girlfriend

in this life things are done, the casters plage is only one
undo my trife, i have given to my life
the one i call dre, that makes my life a fray
i wish that she hath never seen and know my life
have her forget me and go away
that i will no longer lead her stray
let this night of a new moon
bring me my wish to hold true


thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it.

© Copyright 2001 Matt - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-06 09:17 PM


I think this poem is a bit confusing. At least for me it is....Could you explain this a bit. I understand this is how you feel for your GF, but could you elaborate on what you mean by the lines within the poem?



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

mikeykrazy
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2 posted 2001-01-06 10:19 PM


this is something that i wish would happen to my new girlfriend.  she cheted on me that is y

thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it.

Acies
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3 posted 2001-01-06 11:45 PM


dang, you're good
this is only the 2nd poem of your that i've read, but i'm already very impressed

thanks for the most astonishing read
keep em coming

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-01-07 12:08 PM


Vengeance in poetry!  I love it!
Skrew the dark one... down with your GIRLFRIEND!  j/k

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2001-01-07 01:36 PM


That's not cool that she cheated.  Great job on the poem

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Melster
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6 posted 2001-01-07 04:38 PM


Great poem...  cheaters ought to rot in hell...  and one day they will...  I know how you feel...

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

mikeykrazy
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7 posted 2001-01-08 06:58 PM


thatks to all that have replyed.  

acire: thanks i post every once and a while just keep looking.  thanks for the coment

Allan: not down with her, but just i wish she would leve me alone.

well thanks for your comments!  


thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it.

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