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Rising From The Ashes
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Rising From The Ashes |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
As I walk thru the moonlight streets, I hear the crunching of leaves under someone's feet. Turn and see nothing there, Thought maybe it was the air. Go down the street a little more, Only to hear a gunshot and witness a bloddy gore. Look around to see where, Standing there in dispair. Look down and see a pool of blood, In my heart emotions start to flood. Revenge and anger race thru my brain, As she lays there dying and in pain. Holding her telling her to relax, My heart ravaged by a murderous axe. Looking up to the sky, I sit and ask the Lord "Why?" Everyday I see her face, Thinking of her in a better place. Hearing the sound of a gunshot, Thought she might live but I guess not. Looking death in the eyes, Showing no fear much to his surprise. Ran away yelling, Vowed to kill again if found telling. Three weeks in a tiny cell, Makes a person's mind scream and yell. Seeing his picture makes me turn and thrash, Today, I Rise From The Ash.... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You gave me goosebumps! Great poem! And welcome back from the ash! ^_^ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, i really really liked this poem. The ending is thrilling. This poem is filled with utter suspense. Bravo pal.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You are a great story teller The way you put it in poem form is astounding I hope this isn't based on true experience Thanks for the magnificet share keep em coming That was really good  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
This is soo sad, I could never imagine having someone die like that in my arms nor soo close to me, it must have been a traumatic experience for you!! I hope all is well now!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Very well written, this poem is so good! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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