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pharon
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0 posted 2001-01-04 07:21 PM


this is a poem (long one) i wrote way back when...so i apologize if it sux...read on  

I think about it every day
Every minute, every hour.
It can't escape my thoughts
How could i have been so stupid?

I knew exactly what was happening;
You knew too.
I thought everything would be OK,
Didn't you?

Just a few short moments,
Just a flash of time,
And now my life will never be the same
But to you...it was nothing!

It probably never crosses you mind,
But my brain won't stop churning!
Don't think I'm mad at you - I'm not.
I'm mad at me -- I could have stopped.

You're not the first,
And probably not the last.
I just can't help it, or
I just don't want to.

I was loved for those few short moments,
I was special for that flash of time,
But now I'm nothing again,
Until another you comes along.

I don't want to do this really,
Or maybe i do...
the fact is,
I have, I did, and i will again.

© Copyright 2001 maria g robinson - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-04 07:47 PM


What exactly is this about? What did you do?
See you got me so interested i am just dying to know!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-04 09:26 PM


im wondering too!
gives us the meaning...
but it was an awesome poem anyways
keep up the good work and do get back to us
best wishes

~JDR

X_me_X
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3 posted 2001-01-04 09:41 PM


i really liked your poem
my interpretation (sp?) of it though, i did not like.i mean i get a sense that you feel used, and that is not a good feeling at all.
well what comes around goes around so F it.

anyways great job

~All is forgiven but NEVER forgotten~

IsGona
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4 posted 2001-01-04 10:43 PM


Interesting... Very interesting.  I have an idea what this poem is about but I'm sure I'm wrong... I am really curious to what it is.  But if you don't want to share that's cool too.  This poem is really good.
Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

DancinQueen
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5 posted 2001-01-04 10:52 PM


hmm im pretty positive i know what this is about. but i dont want to say anything and be wrong ..so i'll just act like im wondering along with everyone else  

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-01-04 11:53 PM


For some reason, i feel the need to add to the confusion pile.  Please clarify the meaning.
Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-01-05 12:13 PM


I'm with DQ here, I think I know it.  The way you expressed this is interesting, like it's something that you know is wrong but still force yourself to do.  That's how I viewed the poem anyway.  I could be all wrong about that though

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pharon
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8 posted 2001-01-05 11:57 PM


ok...just to clarify - somewhat - what this is about...well, it's not about sex if that's what most of you thought...most people assume that...and i can see why, but it's not    it's about a lot...and yes, some - or most - of it is about physicall stuff...but not sex    anyway..thanx all around for responding...i love this place!

       pharon

Melster
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9 posted 2001-01-06 03:17 AM


Great work, I know how you feel to have something you love and then lose it... it hurts, whether it be yours or someone elses fault!!  I hope everything works out for you!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

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10 posted 2001-01-09 07:10 PM


I liked this poem a lot but im left wondering what it is that you did, i have a few ideas but im not shur if their right but n e way great job!
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