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X_me_X Junior Member
since 2000-08-18
Posts 37 |
hey guys whats up wow i havent been here in the longest time i dun even know if anyone remembers me but i was reading your stuff just now an its all so great as usual wow...anyways heres my poem i watched you kissing her lips i saw you look into her eyes i wished i was blind i heard you whisper into her ear the words i was meant to hear i wished i was deaf i felt your memories of us fading away as you playfully touched her silky hair i wished i didnt care i pulled you close to me but you only pushed me away i wished i haden't cried i saw you running back to her i wish i could have died but what happened? you were mine just a blink ago how could you just stop loving me how could you just let go how could you do that i thought u loved me more how could you kiss her like you didnt love me the night before tears started rushing down my face as i thought about your lies and that is when i woke up with tears in my eyes i realized that it was just a dream as i felt my pillow wet and i knew i had to write this feeling down before i could forget i just love you so much please dont ever let me go ill do anything for you all u gotta do is let me know so baby love me now and love me forever cuz i wanne be with you always together ~All is forgiven but NEVER forgotten~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
As I was reading this I was thinking "oh this situation sucks", but then you woke up! I'm glad to hear this didn't happen, and make sure he knows how you feel  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very well written and expressive. I truly enjoyed the poem, and i wish you the best of luck in the future. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow this was great. Nice to see you back, i do remember you. Anyway i thought the poem was sad at first considering i didn't know it was a DREAm, but in the end it just showed me how much you love the man you're with. Good luck with you and the relationship.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Wow thank god that was all a dream, huh? I felt genuinely sad for you at first and then RELIEVED to find it had only been a dream *LOL* Good job |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Good to see you back! This is a frightning dream, and one that I have lived through. I hope and pray that this dream never comes true for you. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
good trick on us you got me feelings sad, to relieved great job on this poem and welcome back best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I love this poem!! it's really awesome... i love the ending, THANK GOD IT IS A DREAM!!! lol hehehe well congrats on a well written poem. scared the crap outta me but it's cool *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I laughed... I cried... Well ok I didn't laugh... and well I never actually cried either, but at first it was sad and then the twist made me smile. Great poem. Glad to see your back from where ever you went. Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks a lot! I was really upset there...  No, but I'm glad this didn't really happen to you! Good Luck! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I am so glad to hear that this didnt really happen to you and that it was all a dream. I had a dream like this a few nights ago and i woke up crying and my pillow was soaked. This was an excellent poem and i think your got your feelings out on paper extrememly well...good job |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work... you write soo well, I too am glad it never actually happened... We all hope that it never happens as well!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
Your poem is well written I thought it was really good and I hope you don't leave again because your poems are going to be fun to read. --Neo |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
This poem was beautiful it showed me the words I've been trying to say that it work both ways and if he doesnt realize what he lost then forget him...I am sorry to say this to my fellow brothers but we do some wrong things to women. smile babygirl it will be alright : El sol brilla para todos : |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Sometimes I wonder why dreams do that to us They say dreams actually do have a meaning to them Well, I'm glad for you that it was only a dream The poem is really sweet in the end thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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