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jeremydraul
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State of Despair

0 posted 2001-01-03 11:52 PM


Uhm, well this is kinda gross, but kinda funny too! Im sorry for posting this, please forgive me. Don't take it seriously. Enjoy

"Bathroom Aroma"

I write these words
Upon my toilet bowl,
It’s coldness like swords,
Making me outta' control

A smell rises of foul,
And into the air,
As “things” come out my bowel,
I don’t think to care

I search for some cologne
To heal this smell,
From my buttocks it’s known,
As eyes begin to swell

I reach over to flush,
And down this disgust,
Out the bathroom I rush,
With one easy thrust

I'm in the clear,
To my room I meander
To rid me of despair,
And upon my bed I lander


J.D. Raulinaitis 1/3/01

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"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde



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IsGona
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1 posted 2001-01-04 12:00 PM


lmao
That was uncalled for... but somehow funny

mikeykrazy
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2 posted 2001-01-04 12:10 PM


man that was just not right.  but it was grate though. i like that you can turn something that is so discusting into some thing funny grate poem keep posting

thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it.

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2001-01-04 12:35 PM


dude...........ew.....
dude...........EW!
DUDE!!!!!!!!!!
EWWWWWWWWW!!!!!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Skyfire
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4 posted 2001-01-04 01:03 AM


You know, in a sick, disgusting, repulsive way, that actually cheered me up somehow. Maybe it helped me realise that there ARE people out there with more problems than I have. *LOL* I needed that after the evening I had... NOT!!! I agree with Dopey-

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!
~*Rhonda

PS. That's just wrong. Some people's kids these days... hey my dad would like that...  

"I am Canadian" - Joe
If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph

Skyfire
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5 posted 2001-01-04 01:03 AM


You know, in a sick, disgusting, repulsive way, that actually cheered me up somehow. Maybe it helped me realise that there ARE people out there with more problems than I have. *LOL* I needed that after the evening I had... NOT!!! I agree with Dopey-

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!
~*Rhonda

PS. That's just wrong. Some people's kids these days... hey my dad would like that...  

"I am Canadian" - Joe
If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph

Greeneyes617
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6 posted 2001-01-04 03:03 AM


TOTALLY GROSS.......but very creative.......
Not sure if those are the right word for it .......I never know what to expect to read next.  

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-01-04 01:11 PM


I love skyfire's response, and Dopeys.   This is something that took a lot of guts to post, how repulsively entertaining    I think more people should post sick stuff like this   haha......

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Isabel Galaxia
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8 posted 2001-01-04 07:55 PM


Quite lovely there Jeremy yeeeeeeeeeeeah, *ahem* eww *ahem*
Bel

Pixie-Babe03
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9 posted 2001-01-04 08:02 PM


DANG!!! that is nasty man!! LOL funny but still YUCK!!! *plugs her nose*
~*Justine*~

Ina
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10 posted 2001-01-04 09:38 PM


ok....that was seriously some pretty nasty stuff....reminds me of how my bathroom smells after my dad goes in.....lol hahah
i laughed when i read it it was hilarous. seriously i agree with dopey on this
EWWWWWWWWWWWW......
Regina
ps great poem though  

X_me_X
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11 posted 2001-01-04 09:45 PM


lol
that was funny
wow u must be really creative what else have u written about hehe im afraid to find out

jeremydraul
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12 posted 2001-01-04 10:16 PM


hahahaha, i feel so weird now... I cant believe I posted this...
...I cant believe I thought of this!!

thanks for not taking it seriously

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

DancinQueen
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13 posted 2001-01-04 10:29 PM


totally disgusting..but it brought a smile to my face    

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

~sugarpie313~
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14 posted 2001-01-05 03:27 PM


I'm going to be different then everyone else in my opinion. I LOVE THIS!!!!!!   LOL it takes balls to write this and congrats on a kick ass poem!!!

~*VALERIE*~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

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