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CareBear3
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0 posted 2001-01-02 07:50 PM



The Way

She had a way of innocence around her,
Like she wore it on her sleeve.

Undeniably eager to learn about love, about life, about the world.
Not afraid of what was to be, for she could not expect what was right under her nose.

Not afraid of what was to be, and not expecting either, but blinded by thick glasses Covering her bright brilliant blue eyes, masking her, shading her, protecting her.  

Thick glasses on the table of the coffee house ‘round the corner, reflecting distorted Images of the people walking in.

Distorted images of people walking in and passing by
Lies coating the insides of their shirts,
Not visible to her bright brilliant blue eyes.

Lies not easily detected or maybe just left alone their sleeves of experience
Outlasting those or her own.

Experience used the innocence like a wolf does to a lamb.
And this meek little lamb eventually learning of what the plan was that had been laid upon her.

The white skin turned to gray for the softness all gone rough
The innocence washed away, thrown in with the colors and plaids and silks lost among The wash.

Now this meek little lamb with a way about her went out to learn the world.
To learn of love and life and friendship, to learn the stories left untold.

Not expecting to find danger but a single sliver clover.
Not expecting lies and deceit, but a fairy tale ending.

But what she looked for was not what she found,
For life was not all black and white.
She found the grays and greens the cottons the silks the plaids, the brights.

She had a way of experience around her,
Like she wore it on her sleeve,
A sleeve of beautiful colored garments enhancing her
Bright brilliant blue eyes for now all the world could be seen.

  



"In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable"

~Kelley

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1 posted 2001-01-02 08:32 PM



       Cripes, this completely rocked!!
Not afraid of what was to be, and not expecting either, but blinded by thick glasses Covering her bright brilliant blue eyes, masking her, shading her, protecting her.  

That's me all over. Please keep posting!!!
~Carly


inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-02 09:58 PM


hey, nice post!
dont think ive read ur work but this one was great
cant wait to read more
best wishes

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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3 posted 2001-01-03 12:29 PM


Uh... how do I say, 'Brilliant'? wow, that is great! I can't WAIT to read more of your work!!

~*Rhonda

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4 posted 2001-01-03 12:42 PM


NIce........you oughta post more around here. We're all missing out.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2001-01-04 11:24 AM


Nice job on this one, it's really good

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Suga_Baby
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6 posted 2001-01-04 08:32 PM


This is good! Very very good!   Great work
Allan Riverwood
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7 posted 2001-01-05 12:44 PM


Wow... this was difficult to read because of the colours, but that actually served to enhance the message.  Was this your intent, or was it simply a bonus?  
Yes, very nicely written.  A truly great poem.  Please don't hesitate to share some more of your work!

IsGona
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8 posted 2001-01-05 11:45 AM


This great.  I agree with every one else... I look forward to reading more

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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