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lilpoet
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since 2000-12-30

Posts 55
Dallas,Tx

0 posted 2001-01-01 12:44 PM

Where the wind blows free
There's that big tree
All colors of red, orange, and blue
And yellow too
Animals squirming up and down the trunk
Even down to where the roots sunk
It's winter time and getting cold
The leaves begin to fold
The wind blows swiftly
All across the tree
Then the leaves start fall
Sending winters call

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2001-01-01 01:49 PM

Wonderful imagery LilPoet! I especially love the little animals scurrying about, lovely visuals you've penned!

Best wishes,
/Kit

lilpoet
Member

since 2000-12-30

Posts 55
Dallas,Tx

2 posted 2001-01-01 02:44 PM

I'm bumping this up because I really like this poem..It's not all that great, but it's cute, so tell me what you think. I thought it was good for this time of year.

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

3 posted 2001-01-01 04:32 PM

nice representation of the seasons changing, this one was nice and short and straight to the point!

~JDR

"A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis

Virgil
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since 2000-12-29

Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2001-01-01 04:46 PM

Nice imagery here...very good imagery in fact, well done!

"By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee."

"I AM CANADIAN!!"

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-01-01 07:20 PM

LilPoet~
Delightfully done !
I particularly liked this -

'It's winter time and getting cold
The leaves begin to fold'

Kind of reminded me of the way we
hold ourselves trying to stay warm.

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

6 posted 2001-01-01 07:50 PM

I love this! it just paints a picture in my mind

you have a great way with words. keep up writing like this, it's awesome.

~Valerie~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-01-01 11:32 PM

BRrrrrrrrrrr what a cold poem......brrr