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Tears of Glass
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since 2000-12-04
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Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure

0 posted 2001-01-01 01:57 AM


Delicate glass,
The cracks are taped,
One harsh word,
Is all it takes.

With this damaged soul,
The tape won't hold.
I have to regain control,
To fit the mold.

I add more tape,
As more pieces fall.
Some are lost,
But I can't save them all.

There's no pretty face,
Just tape and scars.
I cover them up,
They're hidden so far.

I can't hide from the truth.
My mirror's cracked.
She sees the gaps,
And all that she lacks.

She'll never be whole,
She can't get it back.
And every day,
There's another crack.

*Jennifer

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer M. - All Rights Reserved
Melster
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since 2000-12-09
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1 posted 2001-01-01 02:04 AM


Great poem... look forward to more!!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2001-01-01 04:00 PM



   This was a very good poem. I could understand the whole mood of it well...Smile.

   ~Carly

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
3 posted 2001-01-01 04:22 PM


Wow. This one was really well written. The escalation of the process is awesome and intriguing, great poem!

~JDR

"A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis

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4 posted 2001-01-01 09:23 PM


Great poem. You are so talented....nice one here, once again!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

IsGona
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Posts 723

5 posted 2001-01-01 10:01 PM


Once again, amzing job Jennifer.  This poem seemed to have a captivating rhythm to it.
My fav verse was:

"With this damaged soul,
The tape won't hold.
I have to regain control,
To fit the mold"

Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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6 posted 2001-01-02 12:45 PM


Sounds like you were really hurt by someone recently... More hurt than is fair. If you need to talk, drop me a mail. I'll listen. Awesome poem

~*Skyfire

"I am Canadian" - Joe
If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph

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7 posted 2001-01-02 08:15 PM


WOW!!!  I've said this once before but I'll say it again "talking about passions in poetry"  This is it.  hope you get better  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Will DeVore
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since 2001-01-01
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Weddington, NC, USA
8 posted 2001-01-02 09:19 PM


This is the second poem by someone else I've read here and all I can say is "wow."  There is an incredible amount of feeling here.  Quite a bit of emotion fit into so little words.  Beautiful in its symbolic simplicity.

As this is on a teen board, I have to assume that you're a teen (like myself).  It's always said when someone is hurt so young.  I'll pray that you're able to rebuild your life.  Perhaps not with something so flimsy as tape, but maybe you'll be able to actually blow the glass of the cup into a brand new, whole cup.  The scars will never disappear, I'm afraid, but what will remain will be even more beautiful than before as it takes strength to do that sort of rebuilding.

As I offer to everyone, you are welcome to contact me through E-Mail or ICQ.

I can tell that you have a tender heart, please don't let it go to waste.  Use your incredible talent for poetry to release those emotions trapped within your heart.  They'll help you on the inside as you let those feelings outside.

Lakewalker
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9 posted 2001-01-04 10:26 AM


I agree with Jason on this one and Will said a lot of wose words.  Keep writing these great poems.< !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-04-2001).]

Neokrew
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Posts 60
VA
10 posted 2001-01-04 11:23 AM


Hey Jen,

Oh my god, this is my favorite poem you have ever written this is probably one of the best poems I have ever read ( hehe yeah I can read). Keep making work like this it very (and so on) good no great. Keep posting.

Your bestist friend  
   --Neo

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