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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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I'm silently screaming, though I make no sound Inside I'm bleeding, I think it's starting to show Yesterday you asked me what to do Oh darling, if only I knew But I've nothing to tell you I'm lost, I'm alone Consumed in my own fear Bluntly you admitted you were scared I can't tell you what to do I'm torn, more scared than you You insist that I'm beautiful, what I want to hear I can't believe you, you say I've no self esteem Somewhere inside I'm crying, you can't see it The scenarios, you created in your head Like my not eating ending in my being dead You want me to promise, you want me to be safe I can't promise When I'm so scared, I'm so alone, and I won't let you know, and I Can't let it show I'm such a wreck, with no idea what to do Tears me apart, hurts me so much because I love you Be patient, I hope you figure out what to do Because I'm silently screaming, but you can't hear me It's been a while. Happy New Year. Help? Please.. Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Beautiful poem... my suggestion ot you is to tell him how you feel... the truth... this will stop you screaming out to him but yet he not hearing... what have you to lose? You know how he feels... just let it all out... Good Luck... Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
sorry... [This message has been edited by Melster (edited 01-01-2001).] |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
opps... sorry guys I accidently hit this too many times... Moderators, can you please delete this one and the one before that says "sorry" thanks!! Melz!! [This message has been edited by Melster (edited 01-01-2001).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww hun im so sorry...i REALLY hope things get better for you soon. This was an excellent poem..it had a lot of feeling and emotion put into it. I really hope you can find happiness very soon. Feel better.. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice poem that expressed a lot of meaning.. hope all is well soon! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This had so much emotion in it...you expressed everything really well. I think you should tell him how you feel instead of waiting for him to figure it out. Hopefully everything will work out soon. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
wow.. this is so strong... i am at a loss for words, i really thinkyou need to tell him whtat you are feeling and best of luck, great work in expressing your emotions ~*Justine*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well hey.....welcome back. This was pretty sad.....hope things get better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Mail me, please!! I'll listen... I feel your pain in your poem... I know what you're going through. Please mail me! ~*Skyfire "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible expression Bel ... you have drawn me in, and hon, I do know how you feel. For some, it is so difficult to accept the beauty that other's see. Many times we cannot see it ourselves, and we punish ourselves in a number of ways ... from eating disorders to self-imposed perfectionism in an effort to understand, like and accept "ourselves". It often goes hand in hand Bel. Understanding and healing begins as so many have said above ... communication. Speak to an adult ... could you talk to a parent, another adult, counsellor, teacher or clergy? I'm only an e-mail away too, and am always here to listen. You are a talented and gifted writer Bel, and healing can be found there also, it's such a release to write. Keep expressing yourself, open the lines of communication at home, try to begin to accept the beauty in you that others see ... and continue to write ... we will all be here reading. Take care, Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great writing, and I think Kit and the others pretty much said it all. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Thank you all so much for repling, you don't know how much it means: Melz- Yeah, that's a good idea. I don't want to tell him everything, because I'm afraid it would hurt him... SugarHigh- Thanks so much  !Jeremy- hehe, thanks! DreamerGrl- Yeah, I know, but I'm still not sure-if that makes any sense. Guys aren't telepathic are they?  Justine- Thanks, I didn't know it was strong! Dopey- I'm glad to be back . Skyfire- I'll try to e-mail you soon, thanks. Kit- Thanks, I totally understand what you're saying. I'm not the most trusting person though, so really talking to people(in any detail) about this is hard. Lakewalker- Thank you Thanks again everyone!! Bel |
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