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0 posted 2000-12-31 09:27 PM


With this key that I give to thee,
You can unlock the secrets of me.
What makes me tick is hard to know,
If you look, you'll find out though.
I'm not that complex, you just have to find,
The key for both my heart and mind.
One key it is, it works for both,
I now can't lie, you have my oath.
Guard it well, this key I give,
With my secrets hurt, I cannot live.

~*Skyfire

© Copyright 2000 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-12-31 09:38 PM


This was a really good poem. A key to unlock your internal beauty. Hope whoever opens it up treats it with fragile care...



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2000-12-31 10:27 PM


I really like this one a lot...it was really original. Hopefully you gave the key to the right person and you wont get hurt. Good luck.
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3 posted 2001-01-01 12:51 PM


Great work...  lets hope they treat your sole with care!!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

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4 posted 2001-01-01 05:00 PM


Cute poem   Short and sweet is always nice. Great job!
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5 posted 2001-01-01 05:03 PM


good description and it was very cute!

~JDR

"A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis

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6 posted 2001-01-01 06:11 PM


great poem   very cute   good luck with whomever you are giving the key to  
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7 posted 2001-01-02 12:14 PM


This is great poem.  IT's wonderful that you have someone you can trust with the 'key' to your heart and mind.

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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8 posted 2001-01-02 01:00 PM


that person better not hurt u once u give it to that person...or else!!!lol...jk.
it was nice and short. i like it!
REgina

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9 posted 2001-01-02 01:12 PM


Short and sweet. Good job. I enjoyed reading this.
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10 posted 2001-01-03 06:33 PM


oooooooohhhh....this is really sweet.  lovin it a lot  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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