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Pixie-Babe03
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0 posted 2000-12-31 06:18 PM


-=Can You?=-

Can you be the one,
the one to make me new?
The one to look in my eyes,
when my world is blue?

Will you treat me right?
Better than i have been before?
Heal my wounds completely,
make it so i will hurt no more?

Can you make me forget,
about my hurtful past?
And can you assure me,
that your feelings for me will last?

If you can be these things,
that i need you to be,
I know deep inside my heart,
that you are the one for me.

© Copyright 2000 Justine - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-12-31 06:34 PM


HEY SIS!!!!!!   great poem...glad i could help... NOT!  j/k i extremely love this one because it applies to me so well!!  hehehe
ttyl

(; Valerie  

*do not offer yourself to the world, yet let the world offer itself to you*--Me :)

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2 posted 2000-12-31 06:59 PM


Nice one here, very sweet.
hope it all works out.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2000-12-31 08:51 PM


This was a really good poem. I hope that you find someone to give you all that you want soon. Great job  

Melster
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4 posted 2001-01-01 01:30 AM


Great Work and good poem...  we know how you feel looking for this person to do this for you!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Pixie-Babe03
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5 posted 2001-01-01 12:02 PM


thank you all for your replies    i'm glad you liked my poem  
~*Justine*~

Acies
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6 posted 2001-01-02 07:38 PM


So much wanting is written in these lines.  Hope you get what you want and be happy.  thanks for sharing.  good luck  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


DancinQueen
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7 posted 2001-01-02 08:37 PM


this is sooo something i'd write. i totally know what you're talking about and going through. if u ever wanna talk just mail me!

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Pixie-Babe03
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8 posted 2001-01-02 09:04 PM


acire- i am glad you liked this   thanks you  
DQ- thank you, i will keep that in mind, the same goes for you if you want to talk!  or look me up on ICQ if you have it
~*Justine*~

jeremydraul
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9 posted 2001-01-02 09:31 PM


sweet post
it expressed feelings very well
DQ n you have simliar styles, which are also unique
best wishes

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Lakewalker
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10 posted 2001-01-04 10:30 AM


Nice poem here, I hope you find the one who is meant for you

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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branden726
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11 posted 2001-01-05 09:10 AM


Pixi hun, this is a great piece im glad your writting again and well its great once again plz share more often.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"



IsGona
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12 posted 2001-01-05 11:34 AM


Great poem here pixi.  Hope you find a man that could do all these things.  He's out there somewhere.  Keep writting... keep posting
Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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