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branden726
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0 posted 2000-12-30 10:08 PM


True love is only happiness with a new name

When you feel your in love and you feel like its true love,

Dont think that untill you know for sure your happy,

Many of us jump to soon, to find that we fall flat on our faces,

Not me, ive found happiness in you, and yes i can tell its true,

Some of us dont know what happiness is,

Find the one you love and im sure they'll guide you along the way,

Love is a long and painful journey but when you reach the end it all pays off my friend,

I am now with this girl,

Who brought a boy who was lonely, depressed and felt like crap all the time,

She took that boy and made him a man, by leading him through what he thought was a closed door,

She lead him down the road of happiness and down the path to true love.

[This message has been edited by branden726 (edited 12-31-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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1 posted 2000-12-30 11:39 PM


a good interpretation of love, good lines here!

~JDR

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lilpoet
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2 posted 2000-12-31 12:02 PM


I thought this was really good.  I believe in true love and from what I can see you do too.  Their out there...somewhere.

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

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3 posted 2000-12-31 01:59 AM


I think the first line is great branden....my fav amongst the whole poem.
nice work here!



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Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-12-31 09:13 AM


Wonderful sentiments Branden ... your happiness shines through the lines!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

branden726
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5 posted 2001-01-01 11:09 AM


Well thank you guys so much i mean i try and well im just so happy lately can u believe its only been 3 months with my gf and well it seems like forever which is good. You guys i owe you all a big Thank You!!!  You guys helped me, gave me advice and guided me down the path to happiness and if there was any way i could make it up to you believe me i would!
Isabelle
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6 posted 2001-01-01 12:09 PM


This is an awesome poem. Your feelings are expressed well. I wish i could write like this again. Keep up the good work.

Jeanna

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


Pixie-Babe03
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7 posted 2001-01-01 05:55 PM


BOO-TIFUL! *L* great work, i must agree with Javier that the first line is the best though   keep it up!
~*Justine*~

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8 posted 2001-01-02 02:15 PM


Great poem, it's very thought out.  The lines show wisdom, nice job !

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Suga_Baby
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9 posted 2001-01-02 07:05 PM


Yes, yes... the first line is by far the best one. I also have to agree with the part about people taking it too fast and landing on their faces *LOL* I have seen that so much in peers... it drives me CRAZY! UGH! *LOL*
Nice work, though, very nice  

Suga_Baby
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10 posted 2001-01-02 07:05 PM


Yes, yes... the first line is by far the best one. I also have to agree with the part about people taking it too fast and landing on their faces *LOL* I have seen that so much in peers... it drives me CRAZY! UGH! *LOL*
Nice work, though, very nice  

Ina
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11 posted 2001-01-02 07:27 PM


it was really good. thats the way love should be. best of luck for both of u.
Regina

branden726
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12 posted 2001-01-02 07:40 PM


well thanks to you all for your reply's and well i like the first line most of all 2 and well just thanks for your reply's.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"



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