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sweetypie5
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0 posted 2000-12-30 01:37 AM


He knew it was a mistake
How many beers does it take
To make him relize
That he was in way too deep
He was dizzy
He couldn't even walk
But still he chose to drive
He had a date
That he couldn't miss
He thought she was worth his life
So he chose to drink and drive
He started the engine
As his mother begged him not to go
He didn't listen though
He drove right away
He couldn't let his true felings show
He knew that his mother was right
But he was a "Big Boy" now
He could make his own disicions now
He drove down the street
Swurving from lane to lane
He turned the corner
Seeing the bright lights
He couldn't turn
Or even swurve
He rammed the car head on
And didn't survive
He woke up from what seemed
Like and endless dream
And saw St Peter and the Pearly Gates
He walked right up
Knowing that he'd be admitted
St Peter looked all through his book
And then he finally spoke
"Your name's not here"
"You can't proceed"
You made the mistake"
"Of taking your life"
"While drinking and driving"
No! He cried
This can't be right
I was a Christian
I went to church
Just because I chose to drink and drive
I'm not allowed
To the holiest place ever
St Peter just bowed his head and said
"You know where you have to go"
"I'm sorry that it hurts you so"
"You know the choices that you made"
"Were wrong, so now leave"
"I know you not"
He cried out in vain
As he fell to a place of eternal pain
But as he fell he thought of this
"His life had come to a sudden end"
"Because of his choice"
"To simply drink and drive"


Remember this when you or one of your friends prepare to drink and drive!


© Copyright 2000 Stephanie Walker - All Rights Reserved
sweetstuff101
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1 posted 2000-12-30 01:44 AM


aaaaww thats soo sad!!! but it's so true to! One stupid mistake can ruin your life...or even worse...take it away. Your poem was excellent. Well written....great job!! Keep it up!! But since you said I had to 'hurry up' and call I guess that means I got to go now!!!

Luv always,  
  Priscilla


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2 posted 2000-12-30 01:58 AM


I'm speechless. Wow. That one is one of the best I've read all night. Wow. I don't know what to say...  

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jeremydraul
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3 posted 2000-12-30 02:24 AM


great message, im glad I read it!

~JDR


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TopGunLauren
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4 posted 2000-12-30 03:42 AM


  My friend almost died because he thought he didn't drink that much and decided to drive. Your poem brought up a very important subject and I hope no one drinks and drives or lets there friends drink and drive. Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-12-30 11:43 AM


An excellent message Sweetypie ... and with New Year's Eve around the corner ... it's a message that we all should remember, well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2000-12-30 12:12 PM


Oh wow.............this poem made the hair on my head stand up in frizzy form........chilling poem.



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Ina
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7 posted 2000-12-30 01:49 PM


wow!i agree with kit new year's eve is on the way.
       SO DONT DRINK OR DRIVE!
Regina

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DreamerGrl27
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8 posted 2000-12-30 03:10 PM


This was so sad, but I think it's really amazing that you wrote this because a lot of people dont even think of all the consequences that they will have to face if they drink and drive. This sent a very clear message and I really hope people read this and learn from it.
sweetypie5
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9 posted 2000-12-30 04:30 PM


Thanx for all ur replys!!! I personally think this is one of my best poems!!!Thanx again!
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10 posted 2000-12-31 12:15 PM


This really was a very touching poem. I think that its great that you chose such a subject to write about. You can never stress the importance of not drinking and driving enough and this poem was a great reminder of what can happen if you choose to do so. Great poem and an excellent idea to write about!!
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11 posted 2000-12-31 01:54 PM


This poem is awesome.. it's very sad.  I had a very close friend of mine die in a car because the driver was drunk.  Thank you for posting this, considering the day, as well.  With New Years tonight, I'm sure we all needed to read this.  Thank you.

*Jennifer

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12 posted 2000-12-31 03:09 PM


Drinking and driving is so unbelievably dangerous. Usually the life they claim isn't their own. I'm glad you wrote this, I hope lots of people read and get the message. Nice work!
xoxo
Jenn


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Melster
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13 posted 2001-01-01 03:32 AM


It is soo sad that people feel the need to drink and drive...  I lost my dad to drink driving when I was 2 and that was 16 years ago...  you would think by now with the number of people who have died this way that some people would learn, but people still haven't and I think that is sad...  glad you brought this one up!!

Melz!!

P.S.  Great poem!!


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14 posted 2001-01-02 07:33 PM


ouch!!!    i know it's wrong but i still did it.  actually, i just did it this new year's day.  i didn't plan to, my friends left with the limo, so i was forced to.  Thanks for reminding me though.

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15 posted 2001-01-03 01:39 PM


Great message, and acire, don't do it again !

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Greeneyes617
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16 posted 2001-01-03 01:59 PM


This is really awesome. Could I have your permission to print this off? If not its ok. I just would love to read this to my O.T.A.D. (Omaha Teens Agains Drugs) group. Thanks for posting this.

sweetypie5
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17 posted 2001-01-05 06:39 PM


Thanx again for all ur replys!! Yes you sure can print it off and use it for ur O.T.A.D. group! I didn't know it was that good thanx!

*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



Suga_Baby
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18 posted 2001-01-06 11:40 PM


Everything I could possibly say has already been said... Great job  
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