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branden726
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0 posted 2000-12-28 08:07 PM



If Tomorrow Never Comes

If tomorrow was to never come,
Would I have been able to hold you for one last time,
If tomorrow was to never come,
Would you know that honey "I love you",
If tomorrow never comes,
I want to thank you for always being there,
If tomorrow never comes,
At least I know that you always cared,
This is one last plea for you to come and be with me,
Be mine for all time,
Dont ever let go of what we have,
Tomorrow will come and hopefully,
Me and You will be hand in hand.

© Copyright 2000 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-12-28 08:12 PM


AAWWW...   that was soooo sweet. I mean, c'mon, girls, who would love to have a guy write something like that for you? I know I would just melt if my guy did. I melted, and I don't even know you Branden! Awesome.

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2 posted 2000-12-28 11:11 PM


Very sweet Branden! It's nice to know that guys out there (besides my own, of course) are romantic.  Well written!  

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
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jeremydraul
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3 posted 2000-12-28 11:40 PM


wow this was really wholehearted. you continue to write with genuine feelings and true emotions.

jeremy r

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branden726
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4 posted 2000-12-29 12:32 PM


you know as a poet i write a lot about true feelings, and well as a poet and im sure plenty of you have done this to i continue no matter what to amaze myself on my writing this is a very touchy poem, my gf was in a car accident and put in fair condition and is suffering from back pains and well, this is dedicated to her!
                   Love ya Lisa,
                 May god be with her< !signature-->

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"




[This message has been edited by branden726 (edited 12-29-2000).]

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-12-29 07:38 AM


This was a lovely tribute to your girlfriend Branden ... you've expressed yourself well, tender and genuine, nicely done! (PS...I hope she's OK ...)

Best wishes,
/Kit

branden726
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6 posted 2000-12-29 10:29 AM


well thanks kit a lot i hope shes okay to and well  im going to see her today and ill show her this poem and i hope she likes it.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"



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7 posted 2000-12-29 10:38 AM




This was an amazing tribute to your girlfriend. I really liked. This is the theme of poetry that I am always writing, but I've only had a couple good ones. Congratulations, if written from your heart than poetry can very easily suprise you! I hope that your girlfriend is ok, and I hope everything between you and her stays this close. God Bless,

     - tq_99

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8 posted 2000-12-29 03:22 PM


Branden, This one is excellent. I hope she knows you feel this way for her cause it's awesome.
                                          Jon

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9 posted 2000-12-29 03:22 PM


Branden, This one is excellent. I hope she knows you feel this way for her cause it's awesome.
                                          Jon

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10 posted 2000-12-29 04:26 PM


Yup yup yup, this poem's really good   I like it, it's such a nice one.  Great job

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11 posted 2000-12-29 05:49 PM


Sweet poem.....glad your gf is ok.....
Hope to see more from you pal!



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branden726
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12 posted 2000-12-30 03:41 PM


Well thank you all once again, my gf is doing great and everything and well, i think i should write from the heart more often buhbye

sweetypie5
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13 posted 2000-12-30 04:35 PM


That was sooo sweet!!! I wish someone would write a poem like that for me! The gurl ur writing that for is very very lucky!
TopGunLauren
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14 posted 2000-12-30 04:39 PM


Veyr sweet poem keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

Ina
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15 posted 2000-12-30 09:38 PM


want to write one for me too?lol......lucky girl u got. hope she is ok.
REgina

branden726
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16 posted 2000-12-30 09:41 PM


Hey there, well thanks for the replies and well yes she is very special to me but then again anyone i care about is special to me and i would write a poem like this for anyone of the ppl i care for.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"



sweetstuff101
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17 posted 2000-12-31 01:50 AM


That is sooo sweet!!! I love it!! I can tell you care deeply about her! Great job...keep writing!!

Luv always,  
  ~*~SweetStuff~*~


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18 posted 2001-01-01 04:35 AM


Great Work Brandan...  Your gf is a lucky girl to have someone like you to look after her as we all know how much you care about her and these days some guys just don't know how to do that!!  Good Work!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

branden726
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19 posted 2001-01-01 11:05 AM


well thanks guys, i am all into giving women what they want and plzing the and im not into treating them like slaves and all that like they did way back then, Well i love my gf alot and i think ive proven that to her.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"



lilpoet
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20 posted 2001-01-01 12:55 PM



This is a tear jerker.  It was so sweet, and you were right..it was a good one.

If tommorow never came, that would be a shame.
Cause I love this place so much, my heart your poetry does touch.

Keep up your writing...it's very heartwarming.  


~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

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