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Tamma
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0 posted 2000-12-28 03:17 PM


I’ve put my heart on the line,
Hoping that you’ll love me.
And it looks as though you do,
When ever you hold me so close.
You run your fingers thru my hair,
And touch my face so gently.

I close my eyes and dream of you,
In my life, they’ll never be another you.
You’re the only one that can make me smile,
And bring me back up when I’m so far down.
Before you came along I hid my heart,
Thinking no one could ever find the key.
But the first moment you touched me,
You found the key hidden behind my tears.
I’ve put my heart out for you, and only you,
No one else knows where to find the key.

I’ve put my heart on the line,
Hoping that you’ll love me.
And it looks as though you do,
When ever you hold me so close.
You run your fingers thru my hair,
And touch my face so gently.

There are so many things you’ve done for me,
You’ve proved to me that you love me so.
When your brown eyes look into mine,
I can’t help but go weak in the knees.
Baby, that’s what you do to me,
Even when you’re not around.
When you’re no where in sight,
I still know you’re here.
I can feel your love for me,
When I know you’re so far away.

I’ve put my heart on the line,
Hoping that you’ll love me.
And it looks as though you do,
When ever you hold me so close.
You run your fingers thru my hair,
And touch my face so gently.




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DreamerGrl27
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1 posted 2000-12-28 07:55 PM


I really loved this...I liked the format and how you repeated the first stanza a couple times...it was really descriptive...really good!  I loved this part;
"When your brown eyes look into mine,
I can’t help but go weak in the knees"
I get that feeling all the time when it happens to me...it's a good weak feeling though.

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2 posted 2000-12-28 08:06 PM


AWESOME!! That was so descriptive-ly cool (so I made up a new word... sue me   ). Loved it lots!

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Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-12-29 10:23 AM


Hey,
You expressed this very well, I like how the poem is written.  Nice job, and I'm glad to hear things are still going great

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4 posted 2000-12-29 10:24 AM


Oh no, I posted twice!!!!!!!  Ah, it happens < !signature-->

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[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 12-29-2000).]

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5 posted 2000-12-29 10:28 AM


well since lakewalker posted twice im gonna at least post once. Hey  this is such a great poem just like all your others and i enjoy reading keep it up.

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tq_99
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6 posted 2000-12-29 10:45 AM



   I really liked this poem. I like the format. You did a really good job here. Another good one for you. Great job and keep up the good work. God Bless,

   - tq_99

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Tamma
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7 posted 2000-12-29 11:44 AM


Thanks Ya'll!! Lakewalker, I didnt kno you liked my poetry so much  hehehehe of course this ones for Justin, as usual   and whats witht the Santa hats? Is Ron trying to keep up Merry?


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8 posted 2000-12-29 05:03 PM


This is good.......looks like things are working fine with Justin......hope it keeps that way!



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Tamma
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9 posted 2000-12-30 08:30 AM


I just wanted to *bump* this one up, since its the first like this I've ever written...or even tryed to write. I need opinions!!!

~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~


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