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jeremydraul
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State of Despair

0 posted 2000-12-27 12:35 PM


Fountains of beauty
Reflect our faces so clear
Such as a mirror


Mountains don't make sense
Up close they seem much bigger
Far off they are small


Ever trace a stem
Back to it's petals of green?
It's a scene to see

Hmm, I guess theyre okay. This is not my style though!

Jeremy D. Raulinaitis 10/27/00 12am

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IsGona
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1 posted 2000-12-27 12:38 PM


These are good.  Haikus are generally written about nature as you have done here.  Great job of meeting the challenge.
IsGona


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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-12-27 06:09 AM


Well if they're not your style ... you've done them beautifully regardless Jeremy! It's always great to try out some new styles for variety, and you've done a wonderful job here!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2000-12-27 01:27 PM



  Hey. These were really great!! I loved the way they fit together, and the words were used so well.

  ~Carly

Dark Enchantress
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4 posted 2000-12-27 02:15 PM


Nature is one of my favorite things in life for many reasons so reading these was a delight. You've written it all so well.  

Live and let live.

~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~


Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-12-27 04:03 PM


I liked the first two more than the third, but they are all good.  These are wonderful images you've shared, thanks for taking the challenge!   

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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kaile
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6 posted 2000-12-28 06:07 AM


you have obivously put a lot of thought into your haikus...i enjoyed the refreshing perspectives which you have offered...
write on!

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2000-12-29 04:02 PM


Good haiku's......keep it up!



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8 posted 2000-12-30 02:31 PM


seems like everyone's trying these haikus and senryus...good job  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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