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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2000-12-26 01:42 PM


I quit using my words of rythmn and rhyme
So I just only bide all of this lonely time
I quit putting my heart upon my sleeve
So tired of always taking the lead
No more words shall fall upon my fingertips
Nor shall I ever expose my soul upon my lips
I quit telling people of how I feel
For they just rob me of my sanity, my life they do steal
Not once have I found someone sweet and sincere
As I have been
So I quit, playing this game
For I shall never win...

© Copyright 2000 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Tears of Glass
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1 posted 2000-12-26 01:55 PM


Wow.. outstanding poem.  I understand what you are saying.  You expressed yourself so well!  Keep posting!  You seem very talented!

*Jennifer

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
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2 posted 2000-12-26 01:58 PM


This one is really cool. I agree totally.
                                          Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2000-12-26 04:24 PM



  Hey. This was a very well written poem, I loved reading it. But please oh please, don't box yourself up like I've done. Although it may seem good at the time, hiding all your feelings is not the way to go...

   ~Carly

Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-12-27 01:15 PM


I agree with Carly, and your poem is written very well, I like how you've done it.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Melster
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since 2000-12-09
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Brisbane, Qld, Australia
5 posted 2000-12-28 01:55 AM


I agree that we shouldn't box our feelings up, but sometimes it is the best thing to do...  We need to think about things and ensure that letting our feelings out is the best thing...  if it's not or you are unsure, keep them inside...  at least until you understand them, but don't let yourself become withdrawn...  make sure you always have someone there that knows how you feel, a really good friend!

Hope all works out for you!!

Don't EVER give up!!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Erin
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~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-12-28 01:59 AM


Ceinwyn~
I must tell you that this is an amazing poem. You have such talent. And I am glad that I am able to read your work. Keep it up!!!


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Misty Blue
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since 2000-05-24
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7 posted 2000-12-28 05:06 PM


I really felt this poem.  Stay Tru
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8 posted 2000-12-29 04:12 PM


this was good but don't quit....just wait...you'll find somebody.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


DreamerGrl27
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since 2000-10-29
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9 posted 2000-12-29 09:00 PM


I'm sorry about everything that's going on, and I understand.  Just dont give up! Everything will work out in the end.
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Twilight Zone
10 posted 2001-01-02 08:32 PM


I'm very impressed...very impressed.  You know, you'll find him one of these days    keep your head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair
11 posted 2001-01-02 09:26 PM


not to worry
you'll recover from this
keep on strolling and searching...
  through these troubled days
good luck

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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