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The Final Destination
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The Final Destination |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
My final Destany, was that you and me, could finaly be together. But now I don't know, because fate made you go, without a love forever. I missed you, And I still do, I will miss you till I dye. But for this time, You'll be just a rhyme, If tried to explain I would cry. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you'll stay, for at least a day, so I can get to know you. My last final destany, realy wasn't meant to be, but now I hope this one to be true. People make mistakes, and that's the brakes, but even about final daestany's? Yeah I guess so, but know I should go, and not write what wasn't meant to be!!! ~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~! That was about crushes and how poeple take them too far. Oh yeah and Allysa this wasn't tward you at all B-coz I can tell you are obsessed and in love with Justin!!!!!!!  @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@ Oh yeah and I wrote this with out Sara!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was great!!! good poems!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
good poem katherine |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
It is only a crush if it doesn't take over your life, when it takes over your life it becomes an obsession. If it ends up being you and them, then it can become love, sometimes and only sometimes. Great poems and well done! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey, great job. I loved it all. ~Carly WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized by someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is great. Keep posting I love your poems. IsGona |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thank you all!!!!!!!!!! Merry Christmas!!! Catherine!!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I really liked the style of this poem..it was very unique. Destiny kinda sux if it doesnt work out the way that you want...but i hope it starts treating you better!! LoL...great poem gurl |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
there is nothing wrong with penning some feelings you have though things might not go your way with whom you're penning for. It's your emotions, you can do whatever you want with it. I do love the poem, you have this certain style that just goes direct to the point. I'm loving it. Hope to see more of your work  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this, the flow was good and... it's just really good!! nice job and keep them coming for us "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thank you! |
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