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Ender
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0 posted 2000-12-23 08:41 PM


Go on or stay, I ponder
Should I wait any longer
Time, you say you desire
I give you what you require

Wait patiently, I will
My life stands still
Uncertainty, with in me
I just want to see

Feelings, not to be shown
Together, but alone
Outcome, so doubtful
Why am I frightful

Eating at me, the wait
Its like you’re in another state
Way from me, you are
Like a distant star

Old times, I long for
Wanting what I had before
Disappearing, it appears
And appear my fears


*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

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Ina
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1 posted 2000-12-23 08:43 PM


i think this reminds me of what i do alot when im down in the dumps.beautifully experesed powerful emotions!
Regina

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2 posted 2000-12-23 10:15 PM


aww man can i relate to this one...i feel like this right now and its the most annoying feeling...i hope things get better for you and everything works out..great poem hun
katherine
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3 posted 2000-12-23 10:37 PM


This is a really powerful poem!! it's awesome, it's one of those poems you read and just go wow!
hope everything works out!

Katherine

Ender
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4 posted 2000-12-23 10:38 PM


thanx people...i too hope that everything works out.  My g.f decided to take time off from a relationship, which i said was breaking up, but she said it wasnt ...AHH...girls are so confusing...!!!

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

Dark Enchantress
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5 posted 2000-12-23 10:44 PM


That is so true...girls are confusing. I'm a girl and I still don't really understand them. We're an odd bunch, we are. Your g.f. probably doesn't want to loose you but she wants some room to breathe. Maybe she's not ready for a real romance. Maybe she feels like you're crowding her. Who knows. But just stick with it and one way or another it'll work out for the better of you both. By the way, excellent poem. You crafted your words well.  
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6 posted 2000-12-24 02:07 PM


Well this was a nice poem. I liked it.....keep up the posting.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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Tears of Glass
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7 posted 2000-12-24 05:56 PM


Awesome poem.. and it's so true!!  Keep posting.. I would love to read more from you.  

*Jennifer

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8 posted 2000-12-26 01:24 PM


I really like the way you wrote this, and I hope that things work out best for you!

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jeremydraul
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9 posted 2000-12-26 01:28 PM


nice expression, i hope things come together.

jeremy r

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