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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-12-22 02:24 AM


NOTE: weird style......poem sucks....hope you enjoy! hehe

Pay Up:


Bah! Bah!
Off! Away!
Bah! Bah!
No, wait stay!

Mind a frost.
Soul to kill.
Beware mine eyes
Fear of chill.

Gloom delight
A jaded mess.
Brain shot out
Caused a mess.

Bah! Bah!
Stop! Don't go!
Bah! Bah!
It's love you owe!






I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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1 posted 2000-12-22 11:13 AM


"Bah! Bah!
Off! Away!
Bah! Bah!
No, wait stay!"

lol....i thought that was the funniest thing ive read for a while.
Regina

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2 posted 2000-12-22 12:43 PM


   Hey bro. This was really koo. My fave stanza was the one Regina noted. Keep kickin!

  ~Carly< !signature-->

WhY
ShOuLd I
Be hypnotized by someone else's lies
WhY
ShOuLd I
Take time and pride in what someone else believes...


[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 12-22-2000).]

Allysa
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3 posted 2000-12-22 12:46 PM


I like this Dopey, it dont suck. It's awesome, as usual. Please read No One WOuld Care, by me. Love you. And don be scared  of my poem, it's about my past, aiite?

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.


Jenn Cirrincione
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4 posted 2000-12-22 04:00 PM


This doesn't suck.   It's definitly interesting though! And it is different from your normal posts.... variety is the spice of life!
xoxo
Jenn


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Salooma
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5 posted 2000-12-22 04:25 PM


well this was interesting  
it was different, but very funny...
and it all rhymed...
wonderful post...

Salma

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6 posted 2000-12-26 12:12 PM


Yeah, I did enjoy it, and I don't think it sucks.  A weird style, from you?  Noooooo, how could that be?!?

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Melster
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7 posted 2000-12-27 04:44 PM


Great poem...  it is always good to see variety in here!!  Good Work!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

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