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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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ok, ya'll gotta help me think of a title here. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ My first boyfriend broke up with me So many years ago... He was my first kiss, As well as my first “date”. When he broke it off, I never thought I’d get over him. But then another walked into my life, He was “special” just like the last... But I grew to love him so much more, So much that I gave him my heart. He became my first love, But he broke my heart in two. I cried, and cried, and then I cried some more, I gave up on guys and thought I’d never love another. But then you walked into my life, And became another one of my firsts... YOU, Justin, were the first I ever “truly” Fell in love with... I long to feel your lips on mine, I dream of your hands on my face. I love it when you run your fingers, Thru my hair. Sometymes I can hear you proclaim your love, When you’re nowhere in sight. During the night, I can feel your arms around me. Dear Justin, they may have been my first boyfriend, Or even my “first love”. But I love you so much deeper, Than I ever did them. They both hurt me, In the end. After all the pain from, The two of them. I promised myself, I’d never fall again. But then when I saw you, I couldn’t help but fall. I love to look into your eyes, And that’s how I fell. Everytyme I look into them, I can’t help but fall all over again. They ended those relationships. And I’m keeping them that way. Justin they’re a part of my past, And I’m not gonna worry about them. For why should I worry about the past, When its my future I’m working towards? And I hope, that somehow, That future involves you. Justin, I love you!!! ~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~ www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me [This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 12-22-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
So sweet, Tamma...I'm sure he loves you too! Beautiful love poem! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
That is the greatest feeling in the world to love someone whole heartedly, I hope it lasts for you two. Jon |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful love poem, such words can only stem from true devotion. I'm terrible with titles, but how about "They were first, but you were the best"? "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was really nice...I know what you mean about not being able to help falling for him everytime you see him. As for the title, maybe something like - From my first to my final, or That was my past but this is my future, or The Past to the Future, or (You are) my real first true love, |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
your heads all justin eh? nothing wrong with that! great expression -Title- "Your My Number One" jeremy r< !signature--> "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 12-21-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Title: One and Only anyway i liked this a lot.........this kicked butt!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
wow so sweet!! and so good!! |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Thankx Ya'll...I liked Lovebugs's title "They Were First, but You Were the best" Thanks again!!! ~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~ www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow!it rocked. Lovebug's was the best, sorry guys. i have to agree. beautiful poem. i think this is guy is worth it dont let him go. Regina |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Your happiness shines through every line Tamma ... great expression of this wonderful love you have found!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Title: You're Nothing but the Best This sentiment is lovely, I hope you two stay happy. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really liked the part below and think the whole poem is really good. nice job of writing this one "Justin they’re a part of my past, And I’m not gonna worry about them. For why should I worry about the past, When its my future I’m working towards?" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Thanks Lakewalker!! I've been whisphering that phrase to myself for the past 3 months now...My Goodness, I love him to death!!  ~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~ www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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