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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

0 posted 2000-12-19 11:53 PM

"Set these gloomy clouds aside,
Call upon the light that died,
Cast all shadows that exist,
And murder darkness in dismiss."

Soon brilliant Dawn grew weary,
The sun's rays turned so teary,
Colors of gray appeared tonight,
The sky now didn't seem so bright,

"I laugh at you oh tired one,
I've now destroyed all the fun,
I'll make your day feel so blue,
As the curtain of black comes to you."

Dusk arrives so fast and sour,
Stars shine light all the hour,
Now I wish when I soon awake,
Dawn is back for heavens sake,

Jeremy D. Raulinaitis 12/19/00

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"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~

[This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 12-21-2000).]

Hallie_Angel
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since 2000-12-06

Posts 102

1 posted 2000-12-20 07:20 AM

Hey Jeremy,
Cool poem, I liked how you wrote about morning and night the way you did. Keep writing!!!

Catherine!!!

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

2 posted 2000-12-20 03:21 PM

This is a wonderful poem. I always love the Dawn, and the promise that it will come each day. Thanks for posting.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-12-20 05:00 PM

Very creative, nice job as usual

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jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

4 posted 2000-12-20 11:00 PM

thanks, im glad you liked the theme.

jeremy r

"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~

kimmy
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since 2000-07-31

Posts 98

5 posted 2000-12-20 11:38 PM

this was awesome..i really enjoyed it and the toic was a great new idea...cannot wait to read more..

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2000-12-20 11:52 PM

This was great jeremy......another great one! You are seriously coming up with some great stuff. I see a vast improvement from when you first started to post. I like this!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

7 posted 2000-12-21 11:05 PM

thanks kimmy! wow, dopey that means a lot, thanks all!

jeremy r

"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~

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