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Zombie Man
Member

since 1999-06-22

Posts 52
Va

0 posted 2000-12-19 03:29 PM

I woke up this morning.
To find myself in another.
Without your beauitful face to greet me.
Where did you go to?
I searched up and down but never did find you.
Now my life feels so empty, with nobody to guide me threw life.
Now just living on my emotions to show me the light.
But i truly need your help.
Your heart was so pure.
So understanding.
I'm always to late to stop this cruel fate.
I try, So hard.
To make you happy and this romance much better.
But I, Don't seem to always leed us in the right direction.
Why can't things just get better?
For one moment cant things be perfect?
Please god stop this torture and fix these problems.
I just want her heart back.
My body just thrives for her skin.
Just once may my this dream come true.
My body just thrives for her.
Your my sweet rose in this garden of life.
Please, let this love go on.
Please don't let us die like this.
Please god.
Please.

DreamerGrl27
Member

since 2000-10-29

Posts 142

1 posted 2000-12-19 09:42 PM

I really liked this poem a lot...I know how hard it is to keep on trying to fix things and trying to make it all work out...it gets really frustrating thinking that you're going to lose this person because you can't make everything better. I wish I had one perfect moment too...I guess you just have to keep wishing till it comes true. I really hope everything works out for you.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-12-20 04:31 PM

I like this poem a lot! I like how it written, you did a really good job. keep posting

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Melster
Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia

3 posted 2000-12-20 04:49 PM

Good Job, I enjoyed this very much... look forward to more!!

Melz!!

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

4 posted 2000-12-20 08:16 PM

if i could write like that!i would be happy!
its beautiful. Its not a nice feeling , i see in your poem
Regina

mikeykrazy
Junior Member

since 2000-12-20

Posts 37
U.S.A

5 posted 2000-12-20 09:25 PM

wow i really like it. i know what it is like to lose a love. read my poem right above yours called first love lost.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2000-12-20 11:45 PM

This poem was great. A lot of power within this poem. A sense of desperation in some points. Good job on this one. Hope all is well!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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