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hopeful Junior Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 27 |
You are my most valued gift from god. I thank the lord every night for sending you to me. Every min. of the day every second of a minute I'm thinking of you. I’m thinking of the love I have and share with you. Thinking of how you make me feel so beautiful, how you make me feel so loved. When I’m with you I feel you wouldn’t let anything happen to me. You are my angel sent from above to shower me with your love and keep me safe. please respond asap. I wrote this for my boyfriend and I need help fixing it up and even if i should give it to him thanks! |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I like this poem - you have written well. I personally wouldn't change anything before I gave it to him because it looks as though it has come from your heart and the best poems come from the heart I think... Good Luck!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a lovely tribute to your friend Hopeful ... you've expressed yourself beautifully in this tender poem. Nicely done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
That was beautiful. Don't change a thing. apsara |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I wouldn't change it either because it has raw emotions in it which is great! Nice job on it  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
why would u change it?!ahhhh its beautiful Regina |
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hopeful Junior Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 27 |
Thank you all for replying to this. I am very thankful for all the things said. and I will give this to my bf very soon thanks!! Hopeful |
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