navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » So Low
Teen Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic So Low Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Words_of_Glitter
Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90
USA

0 posted 2000-12-18 05:58 PM


I wanted to give my heart to him
But he looked it over,
decided it wasn't good enough
And returned my love
But not in the way that I wanted him to
Now I am left reeling...
With the feelings of worthlessness,
That only you can make me feel
But I want to know...
Who gave you the right to make me feel so low?
Your answer is so simple,
I should have saw it myself
But I was too busy comtemplating my self-worth
You pointed at me and whispered,
"You have control over your own emotions."
It was me that gave me the right to let myself feel so low.


"Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without."

© Copyright 2000 Sarah Morehouse - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2000-12-18 07:50 PM


Wow.......yea well you are so right about your realization throughout the poem. Anyway good one!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-12-18 09:13 PM


You've summed up this message nicely Words_of_Glitter.  We cannot change someone else's actions ... only "our" reaction to them. I've used this principal a lot in my life ... and it's so very true!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

LoveAll
Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148
B'dale, USA
3 posted 2000-12-18 09:21 PM


This is really amazing and full of emotion!  You are a VERY talented writer.  I hope you don't feel any more worthlessness because no one deserves to feel that way- no matter who makes them.  Jesus loves you, and He will love you forever.  Merry Christmas!
God Bless and Keep Smiling  

Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint. Isaiah 40:3

Melster
Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia
4 posted 2000-12-19 01:04 AM


Words_of_Glitter You have written this poem well, and I can understand how you feel...  unfortunatly by the time you realise that the person you love isn't going to return your love, it is often too late to save your heart.  I used to know a poem that went something like this...

The heart is not a game
The heart is not a toy
If you want it broken
Then give it to a boy.
He'll break it into a million peices,
And shatter it like glass

I am not saying that all guys do this - but the ones that do aren't worth the time of day!  There are good ones out there - I know a few, but we all just have to wait till one comes our way!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

apsara
Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70

5 posted 2000-12-19 10:42 AM


Its true that only we have control over our emotions but people contribute to this too. Don't let this guy get you down. He's not good enough for you. Someday you'll find someone who is. Excellent poem.

apsara

LoveBug
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697

6 posted 2000-12-19 10:46 AM


This is very well-written piece. I have been through this before, and I'm glad that you realize that you are the only one that can control your emotions. Thanks for posting.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
7 posted 2000-12-20 03:55 PM


Great thoughts in this one, I like how you wrote it.  Nice job!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

xShUgArHiGhx
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
8 posted 2000-12-21 03:52 PM


I can somewhat understand what your feeling in this poem...i offered my heart to someone and im so afraid he's not going to return his love in the way that i gave mine to him..its an awful thing but unfortunately it happens...i loved the poem...great job hun  
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » So Low

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary