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~sugarpie313~
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0 posted 2000-12-16 08:03 PM


Would you be there to watch my birth
And then to see me cry,
Or to watch me build things with Legos
Or at least watch me give it a try?

Would you be there to watch my go to school?
My first day of the first grade?
What about when I come home?
Could we play a game of Old Maid?

Will you help me along?
When I drop my lollipop,
Will you pick it up and brush it off
And make my crying stop?

What about 7th grade?
Will you help me with equations?
I'll need advice and help you know
Try to sway me with your persuasion.

When I start high school,
And start dating all them guys,
I hope I can come talk to you
About problems that might arise.

Because I will need someone I can count on
Someone that will be there for me,
I want to know you will comfort me
No matter what I do or happen to need.


*do not offer yourself to the world, yet let the world offer itself to you*--Me :)

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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-12-17 07:16 AM


What a sweet journey you've penned from birth through to older years. It is so important to have parents or guardians whom we can trust to follow us through all of of years, to comfort and guide us. You've expressed this in a very lovely way SugarPie!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2000-12-17 03:13 PM


I sure hope whoever this is to wants to be there for you and will be.  I think the poem is written very well, nice job

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3 posted 2000-12-17 08:27 PM


this was great and i surely hope this person does pull through with what you ask.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Melster
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4 posted 2000-12-18 02:50 AM


I too hope that the person that you ask this of is there for you because we all need someone to stand by us and help us through.  Good work!!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

apsara
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5 posted 2000-12-18 04:12 AM


Yeah, everyone needs someone to guide them through. Hope the person will be all that you want her or him to be. great job.

apsara

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6 posted 2000-12-20 03:54 PM


This poem rocked!! I loved how you talked about things all throughout your life...i thought this poem was amazing..i liked it a lot!! Your very talented!!
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