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Erin
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0 posted 2000-12-14 07:11 PM




*~Within My Heart~*


Look deep inside my heart,
and tell me what you see.
You will see beauty,
cause thats whats deep inside me.
Its not my looks,
or the way I dress.
Its the way I was created,
like all the rest.
So before you judge someone,
on the way they are,
Look into their hearts,
and you will find a shining star.



People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

© Copyright 2000 Erin Erbs - All Rights Reserved
IsGona
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1 posted 2000-12-14 07:21 PM


Beautiful poem Erin.
Well put.  To many of us, including myself, make unjustified judgements of ppl based on appearance.  
Thanks for sharing this poem
IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Erin
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2 posted 2000-12-14 07:32 PM


Thanks for the reply Isgona. I know what you mean. Alot of us make judgements on the way people look instead of learning about them first.

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

keoni
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3 posted 2000-12-14 07:40 PM


Erin,
Really awesome poem. We all do this every once in a while and it is a terrible thing to do. If we could all act this way things would be great. Very cool message!
                                          JON

Erin
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4 posted 2000-12-14 08:17 PM


Jon~
Thanks for taking the time out to read my poem...It means alot to me...


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

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5 posted 2000-12-14 10:10 PM


Eeet Whas Bootiful...I likd eit vury much......



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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6 posted 2000-12-14 10:41 PM


hey grlie! This was so cute...so true. if only more people would do this.. Keep up the great work!!

**Kiley


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

jeremydraul
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7 posted 2000-12-14 11:44 PM


great insight. these connotations are really wearing people thin, which shouldnt be happening.

Jeremy R.

"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~


Erin
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8 posted 2000-12-15 12:04 PM


Thanks for all the replies!!!They really mean alot to me.

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Melster
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9 posted 2000-12-15 05:36 AM


Well done!  I love what you have said!  It is great!

Love Melz!!

Kit McCallum
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10 posted 2000-12-15 06:43 AM


I loved your thoughts in this Erin ... it's so important to look beyond the container and into the soul. Very nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

DreamerGrl27
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11 posted 2000-12-15 10:14 PM


This was really good...i wish people didn't judge other people by their looks as much as they do...that's not what counts...i really liked this...it's exactly how i feel...great poem.
katherine
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12 posted 2000-12-15 11:44 PM


it's a beautiful poem
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13 posted 2000-12-16 11:42 AM


I really liked this poem and i also think its very true. I wish people didnt always focus on looks and everything but rather on the persons personality and whats inside of them. That is what is most important. Great poem..i really liked this one.
sweetstuff101
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14 posted 2000-12-16 12:29 PM


that was really sweet! I really like this one. Great job, keep writing, I look forward to reading more from you soon!

Luv,
  Priscilla


~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~

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15 posted 2000-12-16 12:50 PM


hey cheese cake

you are indeed a very beautiful person inside and out    You have a heart of gold and have a way to put smiles in people's faces           see, five smiles for ya

I always say " it's not the dress that makes the girl, It's the girl that makes the dress"

Where you been all this time, i don't see you online that much anymore.  And guess what?  This is the type of weather that's good for CHILI   he he he

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Pixie-Babe03
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16 posted 2000-12-16 01:56 PM


great poem! it is very powerful! i love it  
~*Pixie*~

Lakewalker
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17 posted 2000-12-16 11:17 PM


Excellent message!!  I'm sure it's something everyone can relate to, whether they are the ones judging or being judged.  Great job with this!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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