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branden726
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0 posted 2000-12-14 05:06 PM



The Pain,The confusion

The pain I endured when u passed on,
The confusion I had when I learned how,
You are and always will be my friend,
So why this depression?

You could have come to me my friend,
Instead the confusion you brought,
How do you think I felt?
I was the one that got that terrible email,
I had to tell  your parents,
That there 11 yr old daughter killed herself because she could not bare,
The pain, The confusing they brought,
Marriage,devorce,step-mom,step-dad,
These are the things that took her,
The things that hurt her the most.
Now I live without someone who was like a sis,
Just because I live to far to assist.

This is because my bestfriend i met yes she is only 11 but pretty cool no offense you 11yr olds and well im 15 and ive never thought 11yr olds were kool untill i met this one.anyways she has tryed to take her life a few times and well this poem stoped her and well now shes in counseling. sorry im back to the sad poems.

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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-12-14 05:17 PM


Branden- If I read that right, your poem helped her to go get counselling, that's great.  Sad poems are ok, all poems don't have to be happy ones.< !signature-->

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Melster
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2 posted 2000-12-14 05:40 PM


Branden...  I am glad that this poem saved her...  it is always great to know that you saved someone from doing something that they shouldn't!  Life is for Living!!  I love this poem it is well written and well said!!

Love Melz!!

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3 posted 2000-12-14 09:10 PM


Branden good job on helping your friend with the poem. I'm almost 18 and I have a 13yr old for a best friend......well one of them at least. She is so mature for her age. Anyway keep up the good work. Adios!



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branden726
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4 posted 2000-12-15 03:24 PM


well i did stop her and im glad but i mean i dont know poems about suicide.....no good in my book wheather its helping or doing it i just wanna cry  

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"


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5 posted 2000-12-15 08:03 PM



  Hey there. Whatever you do, don't let yourself down just because she is. It's not very pleasant when ya do, believe me...This was a very good poem and I'm glad it helped her. Keep writing.

   ~Carly

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6 posted 2000-12-16 02:16 PM


Branden*~
This is so sad!  ( i'm sorry you and your friend had to go through this  
~*Justine*~

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