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Angel christmas
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0 posted 2000-12-13 06:17 AM




I´m walking away from the tears in my heart
I´m walking away from the broken love
I´m walking away without even looking back
I´m walking away cause the world looks so sad

I´m walking away my star is falling down
I´m walking away cause I can´t feel the ground
I`m walking away as the mirros chruses behind
I´m walking away I don´t read see the signs

I`m walking away as the truth becomes a lie
I´m walking away from the pain within´ my mind
I`m walking away cause time is going to fast
I´m walking away wanna close the book to my past

I`m walking away cause I`m feeling afraid
I`m walking away it made me lose my faith
I`m walking away cause the sun won´t rise
I´m walking away can´t look into my eyes

.......................Brian........................

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1 posted 2000-12-13 02:56 PM


The repetition in this one really adds the impact. i liked it a lot. Good job!


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Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-12-14 03:41 PM


I like how you wrote this one Brian, nice job.

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3 posted 2000-12-14 04:15 PM


Whoa!!! What a message !!! Hope you have the strength to walk away  


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[This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 12-14-2000).]

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