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layla
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0 posted 2000-12-10 02:55 PM


He is not understood by everyone, but i do understand him, i can look deep and see a soul
that contradicts his actions
i can hold his hand and feel the warmth in his blood
comes from his heart
so when they question my love for him
there is nothing i can do
nothing i can say
my heart has this powerful feeling
that words can not convey
I used to wish that he would show others that he changed, now all i want is for him to know
that i love him this way

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IsGona
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1 posted 2000-12-10 03:30 PM


Great poem.  It's to bad your love is misunderstood but just as you it is not important, your love is.  Keep up the good work

IsGona

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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sweetstuff101
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2 posted 2000-12-10 07:02 PM


That was really good...I liked it alot, I know love is tough. But great poem, keep writing!

Luv,
~*~SweetStuff~*~


~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-12-11 01:13 PM


"my heart has this powerful feeling
that words can not convey"

I liked that part of this a lot and the title caught my attention well.  Nice job on the poem!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-12-11 04:10 PM


I understand what your saying and im sorta in the same situation as you...but i dont think anyone will ever believe he changed if he ever does...but i cant help it...i still love him n e way...great poem
Hallie_Angel
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5 posted 2000-12-11 04:14 PM


Lemme guess Ally  that ones for

         *~~~Eminem~~~*

It's a good one, too bad he don't know!!!  

dreamer1 12 5 24
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6 posted 2000-12-12 12:02 PM


wow. hope you keep writing here and that your boyfriend is more understood by people. I think a few of the lines could be separated into more than one line, it's hard to read as poetry. But it was really well written! keep it up!

....peace as a primary objective is dangerous because it implies that we would sacrifice anything for the sake of it....

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7 posted 2000-12-13 05:08 PM


This was sweet and I surely hope that things work out just fine between the two of you.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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