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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-12-09 03:10 PM


NOTE: Well this is one of the first poems i made for the 6th Round. LOOOOONGGG time ago, i probably did this in July. Anyway......I hope you liked it.


Broken Fate:


1 Betrayal
2 let downs
Infinite confusions

3 hell holes
4 depressions
Infinite dillusions.

Numbers of nothing.
Days lost within.
Time wasted away,
The life I trim.

Blind with love.
Full of hate.
Beware your heart.
It's broken, it's fate.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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Tears of Glass
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1 posted 2000-12-09 03:19 PM


Wow... Awesome poem!  It makes you think.. I love this stanza:

"Blind with love.
Full of hate.
Beware your heart.
It's broken, it's fate."

I love reading your poems.  You're so talented.  Keep em coming!

*Jennifer

silvrduck
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2 posted 2000-12-09 03:30 PM


Whoa, this is a great poem!! Same as Jennifer.. i love that stanza. Keep up the great work Dopey!

Take care,
Sarah

with the unknown comes no expectations
in this i find my peace

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3 posted 2000-12-09 07:51 PM


Hey Dopey i really liked this one!!! You really do have a lot of talent...i especially liked this one cause it flowed so nicely and it made a lot of sense to me. Great job  
Isabel Galaxia
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4 posted 2000-12-10 09:51 PM


Wow!!  It's GREAT!  I love it
Bel

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5 posted 2000-12-10 10:56 PM


irony and anger

*hehe*
the great dissonant one

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2000-12-11 01:26 PM


I think this is good, I really like the first two stanzas.  Something about it just didn't do it for  *ducks tp being thrown at him*  I mean I love it, nice job

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Hallie_Angel
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7 posted 2000-12-11 04:11 PM


Hey. I thought your poem was good, I am having writers block wright now. Oh well this will only last a day or so. Where do you live? I and Allysa live in Ohio. We live near  Dayton and both go to St.Peters and are in the 8th grade. We have the meanest teacher alive!!! Hey I think I have an idea buh-bye dopey!!!
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8 posted 2000-12-13 06:15 PM


Thanks everybody for reading this poem.
Hallie, I lived in San Juan, Puerto Rico.
OHhhhhhhh yea.....

well anyway thanks guys!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


IsGona
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9 posted 2000-12-14 10:12 PM


hmmm.... I must have missed this one.
I think was really good.  It's kinda cool to see one of your older poems.
thanks for sharing.

ps ~ I read those poems you told me to check out a while back on ICQ(Arrogant Reformer, Perspective, Jack in a box), thx for pointing me tward those poems... I really liked them.  I'm going to have to check out some more of the stuff I missed from ya.  any how....
L8r
IsGona

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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