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Dazed_and_Confused
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since 2000-12-04
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0 posted 2000-12-08 08:30 PM


*This peice I wrote while havin' a bad day. Everything was just goin' wrong so here it is:

I'm the only one that can read my roller coaster feelings
no one can feel what I feel or see what I see
I'm just an lonely adolesant loser girl looking apon everybody
Why was I made like this?
A hug or a sweet kiss can make my day complete
At night when I try to sleep I feel so alone.
Alone.

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IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
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1 posted 2000-12-08 08:45 PM


Hey there, welcome to passions

This is a great poem.  We've all been there before.  Nice job expressing your feelings.

IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2000-12-08 09:45 PM


Well I hope your future days are better than this one. You're not alone.....so keep rolling.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2000-12-09 01:22 PM



  I've had days like that too. Great job in puttin all that into a few lines of words.

Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-12-09 02:26 PM


I think you did really good job writing this one.  I always seem to like short poems, their length seems to add to the power of the words.  Great job !< !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 12-09-2000).]

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