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jytree
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since 2000-01-26
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0 posted 2000-12-08 10:31 AM


I loved that car,
I did I did,
Even when I kickrd the engine in,

One day when it wouldn't start,
I got a sledgehammer and broke off the radiator part,

I felt bad,
I did I did,
So I apologized again and again,

So I creaped in to the house,
As quiet as a mouse,

The next day was a bit of a shock,
My car was gone what a crock,

I looked for it,
I did I did,

Sunddenly I see my mom and I ask abot old trusty,
She said "son your car was way to rusty",
I had since I was eleven,
Forgive me sone I sent it to the junk yard heaven.

I loved that car


Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


© Copyright 2000 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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1 posted 2000-12-08 04:54 PM


I really like how you wrote this, the "I did I did" was great and the beginning made me laugh.  But sorry to hear old trusty got too rusty < !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 12-08-2000).]

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29
Posts 387
Central Maine
2 posted 2000-12-08 05:11 PM


quality poem!! i loved it, i laughed i cried.. well nto cried but ya LOL well good job!!
~*Pixie*~

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2000-12-08 09:10 PM


Pixie is a liar, she said she cried then said she didn't....naughty girl.
Anyway sorry bout the car. good poem though!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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