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Angel christmas
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since 2000-12-06
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0 posted 2000-12-06 07:47 AM




saw you from across the street
lookt into your eyes
saw an angel fly
you turned and smiled at me
and I felt something in my heart
caoudn´t move was paralized
by my sensuality of love
for the heart who makes me fly
without wings
to a place where an angel sings
the songs of love
abd that angel is you

So sprette your wings and fly
and let your love
shine from high above
out across the morning sky
I can not hide it anymore
my hrart will stanf still
untill somebody opens the door
for the heart who makes me fly
without wings
to a place where an angel sings
the songs of love
abd that angel is you

Yours faithfully brian

© Copyright 2000 Angel christmas - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2000-12-06 04:32 PM


I liked this poem but there's a lot of spelling errors.......just thought that might help in the future flow of your poems. The content of the poem was great though and i hope to read more.



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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
2 posted 2000-12-06 04:52 PM


for some reason...it reminded me of a christmas angel...i dont know...
ummm...it was good..
Regina
aka Ina

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-12-06 05:27 PM


I was distracted by the spelling and probably typo's too, but I like the poem a lot.  You did a good job of writing this

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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