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Is Life Such a Lie?
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Is Life Such a Lie? |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Bluch. Vreni Is Life Such A Lie? I spy my reflection, my cragged face S ee a failure, an utter disgrace. L ove’s too cold to allow a thaw, I cicles hang from all my flaws. F rightful scars left on dirty hands E tched in the skin of unmet demands. S tony eyes witness with a steely glare U nder lids of old dreams, new despair. C hore-ridden days, devoid of all hope, H idden beneath a smile’s kind slope. A lways commit the identical mistakes L ay with death, slowly raise my stakes. I n nightmares only the final truth I find, E very door is shut, to life I’m confined. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is awesome! You don't know how many times I have felt like this in life. But don't give up hope because no matter how crappy things are going, it will look up.It won't be right away but it will. And one good memory outlasts 100 bad ones. Good luck and great writing Jon |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
peanogrl83: I loved this piece. With only a few simply lines, you have explained in detail how so many people feel about life. Keep writing because more pieces like this is what this forum needs. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
You did it again. I know how hard you are to convince you but, like ussual, this is pretty darn good. Keep posting... I look forward to it. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you are really good at writing in this style, this poem is excellent. keep up the great work  !"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was amazing. I love this style. I don't think that i could ever do it as well as you do. I might even try to prove you so vreni love........Mua mua! Great post! Sorry I haven't been on much but i've been studying and playing guitar...Mua!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
the more i read your work, the more i envy your talent. How do you come up will all of these ideas. Your vocabulary is astonishing. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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