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Andrea4writes
Junior Member

since 2000-12-03

Posts 31
Fayetteville, NC USA

0 posted 2000-12-04 06:32 PM

"Blind in a Blur"
I was sitting alone, deep in thought.
Thinking about yesterday, thinking about 'us' a lot.

Then, I thought about 'us' tomorrow.
I thought about you and my heart filled with sorrow.

Again, I thought about yesterday.
Oh, something special we had in our own special way.

Now, in my heart, something begins to stir.
I think about you and me, and all turns to a blur.

And in this blur, but a mosaic of color,
I see that with you, my life was much fuller.

I see how I screwed up, how I could've made it better,
In a phone call, in person, or just in a letter.

I should have told you how I felt, how I loved you so,
How if new cards are dealt, I'll long for long ago.

You waited too long, while I was blind in a way.
And because of that, again, I am blind in my blur today.

You found someone else who will be there for you.
I really don't blame you, and yet, I continue.

I continue to love; I continue to hold.
I continue to live, but I never lose hope.

I'm blind in a blur with nothing to do,
but sleep tonight, let it dry, and dream all night of you.

I'll dream about us; how I want us to stay.
I'll dream about us; I'll long for yesterday.

I'll wake up, and my blur will have past.
I'll remember that I was dreaming, and it will return all too fast.

I'll force it away and go on to face,
The rest of the day, with that same empty space.

I'll fight through the day, not really sure,
How I ended up here, fighting away this blur.

I'll watch you laugh and joke, so happy are you.
Ironically so, I thought that you were as happy with me, too.

If I had another chance, I'd try to show,
That you'd be my Juliet, and I your Romeo.

And you would see that a new man was born,
And see that I am valid for all that I've sworn.

And through my celebrations, I would lock away,
This Blur in a Blind, in a 'mare I call "today."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-12-06 03:57 PM

This was great. It flowed so nicely and i liked it a lot! I'm surprised nobody has replied and i would urge the rest to do so. They are missing out!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2000-12-06 08:47 PM

I have to agree with Dopey on a lot he said...Your poem was amazing and it really did flow very nicely!! I really liked it a lot, you have a lotta talent!! Great job

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-12-07 03:10 PM

I like the way this is written, nice job with it. I think it's really good

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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