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jytree
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0 posted 2000-12-04 01:34 PM


Here we are my deariest friends,
Once again i'm at the end,
Why should I have to love so much,
When it feels like being ran over with a truck,
I'm talking full size semi!!!

Love or lust is a game in my head,
Where I can love the girl purely,
Or just take her to bed.
I am just glad to say I have some control which is really good compaired to some men.

Laugh if you want,
Try and succed,
Of makeing fun of a 6-10 21 year old virgian,
I all can say is you won't succed so nan nan

I have lost my flame that was dear to me,
So now all I can ask is that would you shed a tear with me. : [ :


My lady left saying to me "Get a job, get a life,
Stop this nonsense dream.
Well I look at her right in the eye,
But when I when to say something my brain went dry

So all I can ask out of you,
Please treat me right don't leave me blue,
I didn't know I be in so much trouble,
Still laughning from the pick-up line I used,
I am going to burst,
Oh ya the line was,
If you were a bugger I'd pick you first


Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


© Copyright 2000 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-12-04 07:42 PM


  This was great. I laughed, I cried... The part bout the truck rocked!! Lol, the ending did too. Heck, the whole thing rocked.

  ~Carly< !signature-->

So pardon me while I burst into flames...I've had enough of the world and it's people's mindless games.


[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 12-04-2000).]

Dean
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2 posted 2000-12-04 10:00 PM


I like you style! Sounds so good when you read it aloud. Keep up the good work!

"Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)


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3 posted 2000-12-06 04:13 PM


jytree good job on the expression on this one. i could feel the pain of a love's lost. I do hope that luck flows your way. Keep posting!!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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4 posted 2000-12-07 09:41 AM


This is great~ Just bumpin' this up so more ppl can read about this!~

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.


chic
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5 posted 2000-12-07 01:05 PM


While I was laughing I started crying and then at the end I just broke out in laughter!   Great poem Jay and you do a good job of expressing your feelings.

Love,
Barb

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

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6 posted 2000-12-07 04:03 PM


I also think you did a really good job of expressing this, it's great

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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jytree
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7 posted 2000-12-08 10:19 AM


To tell the truth I was really scared to put this one on because I was really out there when I wrote this one but I am glad you like it.


Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


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